Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced

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Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Production company is willing to advertise positive reviews about their movie for increasing number of viewers for the movie.But, there are many issues that need to be solved before increasing the budget for advertisement.
First main question is How many people attended super screen produced movies in both years? If there is just too little increase in number of people then its the movie quality that needs to be improved. Suppose, last year 1000 people watched super screen production movie and this year 1005 people watched same production company movie.It clearly says that people don't like movie content.One similarly important question is given recommendation don't mention actual percentage of positive reviews. If last year there were 1% positive reviews and this year it became 2% then definitely production company must improve content of the movie.
Additionally, given passage doesn't tell us about the medium used for reaching to the prospective viewers. If medium used is not appropriate then increasing the budget will not cause any improvement. Suppose, production company is giving the promotion advertise at late night after 11 pm then very few people will see their ad So, increasing the ad timing will not cause any change.
At the conclusion, Given recommendation contains many unanswered questions that needed to be answered before taking any step.

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Average: 3.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r screen produced movies in both years? If there is just too little increase in nu...
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...ittle increase in number of people then its the movie quality that needs to be impr...
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...e watched same production company movie.It clearly says that people dont like movi...
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...mpany movie.It clearly says that people dont like movie content.One similarly import...
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...ays that people dont like movie content.One similarly important question is given r...
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...ortant question is given recommendation dont mention actual percentage of positive r...
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...or reaching to the prospective viewers. If medium used is not appropriate then inc...
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...t. Suppose, production company is giving the promotion advertise at late night af...
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...he ad timing will not cause any change. At the conclusion, Given recommendation ...
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...ns many unanswered questions that needed to be answered before taking any step.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, similarly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 55.5748502994 34% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1163.0 2260.96107784 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 216.0 441.139720559 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38425925926 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 4.56307096286 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72703262936 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574074074074 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 705.55239521 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8519681874 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.222222222 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143348859744 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645526525777 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767043518971 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0669148358778 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780263250067 0.0628817314937 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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