In the letter, the author claims that during the summer months, the Balmer Island has a drastically increase of population which leads to the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. To reduce the accident rate, the author suggests that a restriction on numbers of mopeds should be made, since the Seaville's town on the neighboring island has ameliorated the problem after putting restrictions. The statement has a positive intention, however, some questions should be asked to examine whether the advice is adoptable.
To start with, it is necessary to comprehend the details of accidents involving pedestrians and mopeds. For most traffic accidents, there are a perpetrator and a victim. Certainly, when pedestrians are involved in traffic accidents, they are often regarded as victims, since human bodies are feeble compared to the vehicle. However, in some cases, the pedestrians breaking the traffic rules such as running the red light also need to take some responsibilities to the accidents. In the letter, the author imputes all the responsibilities to the moped users, regardless of who is the one that breaks the rules. Especially, some people nowadays tend to glue their eyes on the screen while wandering, having no awareness of their surroundings. Indeed, without moped, there will be no accidents between pedestrian and moped no matter who is the perpetrator. Yet, such measure is unfair to those moped users.
Moreover, the author suggests to reduce the daily supply of mopeds in every moped rental store from 50 to 25. This appears to be a wise solution to the problem since the number of moped might become half as usual. However, is there any limitation on the number of moped rental stores? If there is no limitation on the number of stores, the restriction on daily supply might double the number of store. To be more precise, it's a matter of demand and supply. If the restriction is adopted, there will be a short period of demand surpassing supply. This will evoke residents on the island to start more rental business because the excessive consumers make the business lucrative. A rental store could simply divide their store into two parts and yield one part to their relatives or business collaborators. With such respond, the shop owners can easily elude the limitation and make the same profit. Finally, the number of moped on the island still remains the same, which makes this solution feckless.
In addition, the statement relies on the assumption that the population density and the geographic conditions of Balmer Island and Seaville’s town are the same. Certainly, a measure that solves the similar problem is worth studying and adopting, however, the situations have to be similar to maximize the benefit. Suppose Seaville’s town has a lower population density and smooth landscape. The town can effectively control the accident rate by reduce the amount of moped, since the fewer people is on the road, the less likely an accident will happen. On the contrary, Balmer Island is not commodious enough to accommodate up to 100,000 visitors and its landscape is rugged, which not only makes the island crowded but risky to happen accidents. Therefore, a reduction in number of moped in Balmer will not be as effective as in Seaville’s town.
In conclusion, the evidence in the letter is not strong enough to substantiate the argument. Without these evidence, whether the recommendation is adoptable should be scrutinized carefully.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 565 350
No. of Characters: 2832 1500
No. of Different Words: 253 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.875 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.012 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.72 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 225 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.483 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.284 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.483 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.26 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.462 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('drastically') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...he summer months, the Balmer Island has a drastically increase of population which leads to the accide...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'perpetrators'?
Suggestion: perpetrators
...For most traffic accidents, there are a perpetrator and a victim. Certainly, when pedestria...
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Line 5, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests reducing'.
Suggestion: suggests reducing
...e moped users. Moreover, the author suggests to reduce the daily supply of mopeds in every mop...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...he number of store. To be more precise, its a matter of demand and supply. If the r...
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Line 5, column 1002, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me, which makes this solution feckless. In addition, the statement relies on the...
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Line 9, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ptable should be scrutinized carefully.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in some cases, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2931.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 565.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18761061947 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89469878767 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467256637168 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 920.7 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.22255489022 355% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.866960683 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.068965517 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4827586207 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31034482759 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21251071612 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054164175103 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714172588176 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117197541925 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758423024877 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 98.500998004 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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