Artic deer lives on Canada’s artic regions. They search over the food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since there reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer’s being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across frozen sea.
It may true that deer use migration patterns in order to search for their food but, this argument stated by author does not hold cogent reasons for decline in their population. It is very natural that due to scarcity of food, death can occur but, this argument is rife with holes and assumptions and hence fails to convince the decline in deer population.
It is possible that the arctic deer might live in Canada’s arctic region and move over the ice from one island towards other in search of food but, this argument doesn’t specify that the deer’s cannot swim. There are many deer’s and other non-aquatic animals who can swim and we simply can’t ignore this fact. To strengthen his argument, the author should mention that the water being so cold the deer is not able to swim.
Based on the implication that deer is not able to swim, it is necessary that they need to migrate from place to place over ice. Also, the author mentions the weather conditions about its habitat but, there are many plants that can grow in any weather condition so don’t know the exact weather conditions required for its survival.
Also, the reports given by local hunters may be misleading. It may happen that this report was given by two or three hunters. Moreover, there might be a case where, these hunters went for hunting and just because they were unable to find single deer they thought that the death rate of deer has increased.
The author also says that the hunter’s reports coincides with global warming trends but, nothing specific about global warming effect on Canada’s arctic area is mentioned. Global warming might has caused ice to melt in some parts of the world but, the extent to which it affects Canada is not mentioned so we can’t assume that it would affect in the same manner.
Not being able to migrate may have been one of the reasons for death of deer’s but, it may not be the only reason, death could have occurred due to sudden weather changes or increased number of wild animals who feed on deer. So the decrease in number of deer’s may not only be due to melting of ice inhibiting the deer’s to follow its migration pattern.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ince the decline in deer population. It is possible that the arctic deer might ...
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Suggestion:
...deer’s to follow its migration pattern.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235436893204 0.25644967241 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.182038834951 0.15541462614 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0776699029126 0.0836205057962 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0485436893204 0.0520304965353 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0461165048544 0.0272364105082 169% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.123786407767 0.125424944231 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0436893203883 0.0416121511921 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.23213710659 2.79052419416 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0364077669903 0.026700313972 136% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0752427184466 0.113004496875 67% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0388349514563 0.0255425247493 152% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121359223301 0.0127820249294 95% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2179.0 2731.13054187 80% => OK
No of words: 382.0 446.07635468 86% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70418848168 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.30890052356 0.378187486979 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.212041884817 0.287650121315 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.11780104712 0.208842608468 56% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0680628272251 0.135150697306 50% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23213710659 2.79052419416 80% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 207.018472906 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494764397906 0.469332199767 105% => OK
Word variations: 53.1508560183 52.1807786196 102% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 27.2857142857 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0987938673 57.7814097925 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.642857143 141.986410481 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.724660767414 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 48.4899027674 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.45614035088 1.8405768891 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39668677309 0.441005458295 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.175885434164 0.135418324435 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.116891447781 0.0829849096947 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.670772797884 0.58762219726 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130425478783 0.147661913831 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175021613209 0.193483328276 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882764380292 0.0970749176394 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.262937666207 0.42659136922 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0987016862609 0.0774707102158 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242330303401 0.312017818177 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536796168124 0.0698173142475 77% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.33743842365 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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