In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patro

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In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.

The author presents an argument that an improvement in road projects in prunty county will reduce the number of accidents based on the results observed by improvement of roads in Butler county five years ago.Eventhough improvement in roads is mandatory for highway safety but failing to discuss the assumptions which were considered in arriving at the argument makes it weak.

Firstly, quoting that prunty county also requires an improvement in roads like bounty fails to explain or quote the current road conditions of Prunty county .It is possible that prunty county has wide lanes and smooth surfaces already.Moreover we dont know if the geographical or demographic conditions of both the county's are similar.If the author would have compared the conditions of road in prunty county and also the similarity of geographical conditions of both county's it would have strengthened the argument.

Secondly,the author states the decrease in accidents in bounty is 25% in past year eventhough the roads have been expanded 5 years ago, it is possible that the roads have become very old now and surface might be rough So improvement in roads doesn't necessarily explain the exact reason for the decrease in road accidents in highways and also author fails to explain if there are any other measures taken by govenrment in decreasing the road accidents.

Finally,even if we consider both county's are similar,the 25% decrease in accidents does not give a definitive figure of how many accidents are reduced in butler county.It is possible that the number is very less so in percentage it shows a higher value.Incase if the number of accidents in prunty is pretty high the reduction in terms of percentage may seem very less and might not be a effective method for preventing accidents.

To conclude, the author fails to provide substantial evidence thereby failing to persuade the readers in agreeing to the given argument.If the above stated statistics are compared for both the county's and similarities are shown then the argument would have been more stronger.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265714285714 0.25644967241 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.194285714286 0.15541462614 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0828571428571 0.0836205057962 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.06 0.0520304965353 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0171428571429 0.0272364105082 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145714285714 0.125424944231 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0657142857143 0.0416121511921 158% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91450111609 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.02 0.026700313972 75% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.114285714286 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.02 0.0255425247493 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00571428571429 0.0127820249294 45% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2070.0 2731.13054187 76% => OK
No of words: 334.0 446.07635468 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.19760479042 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.389221556886 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281437125749 0.287650121315 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224550898204 0.208842608468 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149700598802 0.135150697306 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91450111609 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 207.018472906 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479041916168 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 48.7321660038 52.1807786196 93% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 20.039408867 25% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 66.8 23.2022227129 288% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4850296639 57.7814097925 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 414.0 141.986410481 292% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.8 23.2022227129 288% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.4 0.724660767414 331% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 3.58251231527 502% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 94.9437125749 51.9672348444 183% => OK
Elegance: 1.75789473684 1.8405768891 96% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333153426647 0.441005458295 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.318488573939 0.135418324435 235% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0823060741943 0.0829849096947 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.58762219726 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 2.4323767778e-16 0.147661913831 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.22475413174 0.193483328276 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452730146792 0.0970749176394 47% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.362579960921 0.42659136922 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0890149903645 0.0774707102158 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22475413174 0.312017818177 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452730146792 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.33743842365 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 6.46551724138 15% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 14.657635468 34% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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