An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author's places an argument that to combat Vitamin A deficiency in Tagus, government of the nation should do everything to promote the new breed millet, rich in vitamin A among its people. He further supports his argument by saying that millet is already a staple food for people of Tagus so they can easily adopt it. There are many unanswered questions or assumptions made by author in arriving at above argument which makes the overall argument weak. Let us see those questions in below discussions
Firstly, the new breed millet is artificially made, may be through genetic crossovers so it might have side effects to those who eat this food. The author failed to provide information on these and also why the organization did not recommend other staple foods which are rich in vitamin A and why to cultivate a new variety of millet.It might be possible that the organisation is focussed on improving their business in selling new variety millet seeds.
Secondly, the author says farmers will be paid subsidies for farming as the seeds are of high cost but he fails to explain if there are favourable soil,water conditions available for farming this type of millet in Tagus. There are possibilities that fertility of soil might get affected on farming the new variety of millet.
Even if we consider that favourable conditions exists for farming, since the seeds itself are high in price how can people of an impoverished nation will be able to afford in buying this millet to eat? . It won't be possible for them to buy the food and people adopting to the food won't be feasible.
Finally, if the author has addressed the questions mentioned above then it would make sense for the government to promote the new breed of millet. Since he didn' t address these questions it consipicuously makes the argument weak and unconvincing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8927444795 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67264704097 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548895899054 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6530575357 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8181818182 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379278705991 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140012592536 0.0743258471296 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941278090937 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199608870076 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548633346668 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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