Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Young people or young minds are the future of our world. So, shaping them constructively is of utmost importance for every nation. Nowadays, youngsters are more attracted to overnight success and instant fame and they fail to understand that those unrealistic things will hinder one's progress towards success. The author's view young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals is quite understandable and agreeable.
Firstly, one should understand that the inventions/discoveries which changed our way of living is as a result of
persistent work and research and not something which were achieved in a day. For example Edison before inventing light bulb failed 1000 times but it is his meticulousness which led to the world's greatest invention of all time. Eventhough long term goals will have setbacks temporarily but its success tastes better than most.
Nowadays, Media plays a bigger role in shaping young minds and most people misunderstand achievements shown in media as overnight success.For example: An athlete winning a medal in Olympic in 100m sprint, many think that his performance in 10 secs determined his success but they fail to understand the years of practice,hardwork which is spent in achieving it.Long-term goals also keeps people determined and avoid digression. For example : Cricketer M.S Dhoni if he had settled for a Railway job which was considered more prestigious one during his period then India would have lost the most successful captain. Long-term goals enables one to come out of comfort zone and achieve great things in life.
Instant success and recognition makes a person indulge in fame and mislead him in settling for things which will look mediocre in future.It is necessary that young minds realise that short-term fame should be stepping stones on achieving a long-term goal rather than making us complacent.So, young people should set a long term goal and work towards it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'for example', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.275757575758 0.240241500013 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.172727272727 0.157235817809 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106060606061 0.0880659088768 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0393939393939 0.0497285424764 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0454545454545 0.0444667217837 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115151515152 0.12292977631 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0484848484848 0.0406280797675 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00984792802 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0181818181818 0.030933414821 59% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0545454545455 0.0997080785238 55% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242424242424 0.0249443105267 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0181818181818 0.0148568991511 122% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1943.0 2732.02544248 71% => OK
No of words: 309.0 452.878318584 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.28802588997 6.0361032391 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.58838876751 91% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381877022654 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278317152104 0.280924506359 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190938511327 0.200843997647 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.152103559871 0.132149295362 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00984792802 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 219.290929204 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611650485437 0.48968727796 125% => OK
Word variations: 69.6939002874 55.4138127331 126% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6194690265 53% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0909090909 23.380412469 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 111.39157349 59.4972553346 187% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.636363636 141.124799967 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0909090909 23.380412469 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.909090909091 0.674092028746 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 55.9226243013 51.4728631049 109% => OK
Elegance: 1.70588235294 1.64882698954 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331013500424 0.391690518653 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0776863294617 0.123202303941 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0495375411259 0.077325440228 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.569313029146 0.547984918172 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.229922575727 0.149214159877 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140906412533 0.161403998019 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138616405461 0.0892212321368 155% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.213431906389 0.385218514788 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0831782175892 0.0692045440612 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189384520034 0.275328986314 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120540089111 0.0653680567796 184% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.5995575221 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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