In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument states that in an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County has managed to lower speed limit but it was in vain. Therefore, it is suggested that Prunty County should follow what Butler County has done. The suggestion appears to be logical at first glance, however, upon closer examination, there are some specific evidences needed in order to strengthen the argument. I shall explore in the following essay.
First of all, the statistic about accidents happened on highway remains specious. Although the speed limit is reduced, there is no sign that the accidents have decreased. However, the argument fail to provide some evidences to justify the correlation between speed limit and accidents. For example, accidents can be classified in several types and speeding is just one of them. The argument shall provide statistics which precludes accidents other than caused by speeding. Otherwise, the statistic is considered biased when speeding contribute none of the accidents. Thus, in order to enhance its suggestion, the argument has to provide evidences about the statistic.
Secondly, the argument avers that the constructions made in Butler County can be viable in Prunty County to reduce the accident. This suggestion sounds reasonable in the first place, however, the argument should offer specific evidences to indicate that the constructions in Butler is necessary in Prunty as well. It fails to scrutinize and include the existing conditions in Prunty County. What if the highway has already been wide enough in Prunty County and there is no need and space to expand more lanes? If the intersections in Prunty County have been remarkably highlighted yet there is no room for any further improvement? Maybe highways in Prunty County have undergone a series of reconstructions but the accidents still happen. Consequently, the argument shall take the initial highways condition into account to warrant its suggestion.
Finally, even though the assumptions are not true. The 25-percent reduction of accidents requires more evidences to support its validity. What has Butler County done actually contribute this reduction? If there are other precautions have been promoted or drivers in Butler County are becoming more aware of traffic accidents and manage to avoid ones as many as possible? We cannot guarantee that the 25-percent reduction of accidents comes from the constructions which have been done in Butler County. Consequently, it is necessary for the argument to provide the evidences to warrant its suggestion.
To sum up, the suggestion proposed by the argument make a logical sense in an attempt to reduce accidents reported on highways. However, there are some specific evidences to be unveiled in order to strengthen its suggestion. That is, the guaranteed validity of the statistic, the necessity of the modifying existing highways and the authentic meaning regarding to the 25-percent reduction which has been reported in Butler County 5 years ago.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2468 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.251 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.775 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 202 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 76 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.407 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.741 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 326, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...For example, accidents can be classified in several types and speeding is just on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, first of all, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2527.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37659574468 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86195205742 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453191489362 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 797.4 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8291604816 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5925925926 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4074074074 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 6.88822355289 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279268527775 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803764762171 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725730386314 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168509708594 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465150810132 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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