Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer.
With the advance of technologies, people are offered more and more television programs today. Some may fear that with the introduce of many TV shows, kids are greatly affected negatively. However, in my opinion, I think watching television is helpful for children.
To begin with, watching television shows give children a lot of novel knowledge that they can never learn in classes or libraries. TV programs introduce well-examined contents and are promised to offer beneficial learning materials for children. Along with a vivid, colorful content, a television program is more efficient for kids to learn than they do in classes. For example, before my niece attended kindergarten, she was able to count from one to a hundred and memorize all English alphabets as well as simple words such as: water, bear or love. I was surprised with her intelligence and I finally realized the truth at dinner time when she was watching Peppa Pig, a child-oriented TV show featured a pink, girl pig and her family and friends. In this show, they convey a simple idea with various contents such as dancing, singing. These activities totally caught my niece's eyes and she mimic what she saw and said what she heard from the show. She didn't have a teacher to teach her yet she had already learnt so much from a show. Thus, watching television is definitely beneficial to kids.
Second, in addition to offering better learning environments for children, watching television show provides children a quality time at which children, and adults alike are brought together to enjoy the show. As I mentioned above, my niece watched Peppa Pig a lot and she was crazy for it. When she was watching Peppa Pig, her parents were watching with her as well and it was the best opportunity for them share quality time with each other. Although my brother and his wife usually worked lately, they always managed to come home before the show and watched it with my niece. One scene impressed me the most was one episode when Peppa's father came home lately, Peppa gave her dad a huge, heartwarming hug as soon as he was back. All of sudden, my niece approached to her parents and gave a equally huge hug to her parents. That was so touching that her mother almost cried.
To sum up, watching television show will not cause negative effects on children at all. Since these shows offer beneficial contents to help children learn with efficiency, as well as give a decent chance for kids to enjoy their quality time with their families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'fears'.
Suggestion: fears
...ore television programs today. Some may fear that with the introduce of many TV show...
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Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...programs today. Some may fear that with the introduce of many TV shows, kids are greatly affe...
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Line 3, column 955, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... said what she heard from the show. She didnt have a teacher to teach her yet she had...
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Line 5, column 791, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...iece approached to her parents and gave a equally huge hug to her parents. That w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83953488372 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57525878603 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527906976744 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0162307726 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0952380952 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173662649679 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675634519382 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544263153519 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133651118616 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150940869439 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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