Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer.
In recent years, there are opposite views on the effect of TV on children. Some people are of the opinion that watching specific programmes like art related realistic shows can encourage children to work on their vocal and dance skills. However, some are more concerned about their negative effects on the kids. I vehemently believe that negative impact of television watching outweigh its benefits for the kids. I would like to explain this by the following reasons.
To begin with, watching the television box gradually turn the kids into “Couch potato”, which hinders their physical growth and development and stimulate adverse effects on their health. Children belong to a growing age where they can earn most benefits by doing more of physical activity and not being sedentary. My niece, who is 10, demonstrates a good example for this. She dedicates her quality time, playing basketball regularly with friends in the community court, with weekly swimming sessions. This all keeps her physically fit and mentally refreshed for her studies. In contrast to this, my neighbour’s son, who is with my niece in the same grade, doesn’t go outdoor for playing and prefers to stay back home watching TV. Now he has made it a habit. As a result, his reduced physical activity and sedentary behaviour has made him obese. Occasionally in school when he plays on the field he often sprains his ankle because of his unfit state and excess weight.
In addition, Television has adverse effects on the psychological and intellectual development. The children who are not indulged in such activity are more interactive, creative and have better imagination. For example, recently, I came across a research article published in the international psychology journal. The researchers examined the effects of viewing television on the mental and emotional domains for a given duration on the kids of age 3-12 years. They found out that the kids in the experimental group were more aggressive, violent, restless and irritable than the control group. Not only that, they also lacked in their imagination, critical thinking and effective interaction with the external world. Admittedly, if the children spend more time away from television and engage in physical and mental exercises, their psychological and mental disturbances can be easily prevented.
To recapitulate, watching television is really bad for the children. This is because it restrains their physical growth and impedes their psychological and mental development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, really, so, for example, in addition, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3709273183 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9460467942 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5205326481 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1739130435 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.347826087 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180435962237 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538449724414 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599961553594 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120084630151 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022654952436 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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