The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine. A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument suggests that advertising firms whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth based on a recent study. It appears to be logical at first glance, however, the argument needs to justify some assumptions in order to warrantee its suggestion. Otherwise it is specious.
First of all, citing data from the survey, the argument seems to believe that the longer an executive has slept, the more successful his or her advertising firm will be. However, the survey doesn’t provide details such as whether it asks for average sleeping hours within a week, or within a month. If some executives happened to work overnight in the most recent week, their sleeping hours are surely shorter than others. Moreover, is sampling 300 executives adequate to represent the whole population? What if there are some executives who sleep less than 6 hours yet still achieve great success? Therefore, without justifying the survey, the argument’s suggestion remains fallacious.
Secondly, the argument believes that the prosperity of an advertising firm relies on how long does its executive has slept since it indicates that executives who sleep more than 6 hours bring more profit and faster growth to the firms. However, it is oversimplified to contribute a firm’s success to only its executive. Every employees in a firm can bring a profit through working together and making the firm prosperous. For example, if everyone is so dedicated and careful that not a single mistake is made, the firm can grow certainly.
To sum up, I find this argument’s suggestion specious and there are some assumption needed to be justified. As mentioned above, the argument has to prove that the validity of the survey, the credibility of a 300-sample out of the whole population and the correlation between an advertising firms to their executives.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1549 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.981 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.726 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.42 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...s in order to warrantee its suggestion. Otherwise it is specious. First of all, citing...
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Line 5, column 114, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...m relies on how long does its executive has slept since it indicates that executive...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
... suggestion specious and there are some assumption needed to be justified. As mentioned ab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, as to, for example, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 310.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21612903226 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93034111726 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564516129032 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3906692286 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186474619702 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060778887117 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586834478859 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117570399149 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406677377264 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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