The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement claims that the surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people. I firmly disagree with it and I shall provide more details in the following essay.
To begin with, the surest indicator of a great nation doesn’t reflect what people really are in such nation. People may lead a miserable live, sacrificing themselves to contribute their country’s greatness. For example, Nazi German during 1930s. The country was considered one of the most powerful country of its time, resurging from a misery and reanimating its finance and expand its military force shortly after World War I. However, as great as the Nazi German may seem, it has sacrificed its people’s welfare in order to achieve greatness. Jewish people are the case in point. Due to the historical and political hatred against them, Jewish people were discriminated and even forced to leave their country. Albert Einstein, the greatest physicist, was a victim at that time, who eventually fled to the US.
Additionally, a great nation is usually being considered one by its outstanding artistic or scientific achievements from its people instead of the welfare from the whole. For example, in China’s history, the Ming Dynasty which reigned most of the continent at 14th century, was considered the most powerful country compared to England, Spain and Dutch. It introduced great amount of inventions and goods to the east by Arab people and European were amazed by the elaborated goods such as well-painted china, a piece of pottery which contained complex drawing of animals on it. Also, the introduced of silk, food, even bombs from Ming Dynasty changed western people’s view dramatically. However, the Ming Dynasty was considered the most chaotic period through Chinese history, most rulers were incompetent and people were living in misery. There were a lot of disasters so corps could not grow. What made it worse was the government still managed to exploit people by requiring more tax. People eventually fought back and overthrew the dynasty.
Admittedly, some argues that the general welfare of its people is the finest indicator to a great country. Take, Japan after World War II, for example. They lost the war and the economy was in depression while people were exhausted and diffident. However, they stood up quickly as the government passed laws to reconstruct the country, introducing social welfare to encourage people to get back to normal life, and therefore rebuild their home without major obstacles. That’s a reason why Japan is considered a great nation at this point.
To sum up, the surest indicator of a great nation is not represented by the general welfare of its people. As mentioned above, there are many “great” countries yet their people are leading in a miserable lives. Therefore, I firmly disagree with the statement’s claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'during the 1930s'.
Suggestion: during the 1930s
...s;s greatness. For example, Nazi German during 1930s. The country was considered one of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2513.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23541666667 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88970800019 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50625 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.1037975441 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6538461538 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249753256183 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790918684253 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125100586587 0.0758088955206 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202094320915 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130983791386 0.0667264976115 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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