Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.
The statement asserts that learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; therefore, students cannot be motivated by school or college alone. Although the statement makes a logical sense at first glance, I firmly disagree with its statement and I shall explore in the following essay.
To begin with, students are driven by curiosity and they are pursuing all kind of knowledge whatever they are interested in. To be sure, what students choose to learn is indeed a personal matter. However, places such as school and colleges provide an impeccable platform for students to discover what they yearn for as well as provide handful resources for them the pursue knowledge they desire. A compelling example is, in Taiwan, some colleges provide an academic year for students without requiring them to major in a specific subject. On the contrary, students are encouraged to enroll in classes from different field of study. It is believed that such studying pattern can help students unveil their aptitudes and their talents. Consequently, even though learning is regarded as personal discipline, school and college can still offer motivation for students to obtain knowledge they want.
Additionally, one cannot learn more without learning from others. That is, although learning is a personal issue, learning alone is meaningless and in vain. No student is omniscience and one will be confronted with blind sides. Therefore, learning knowledge with others are crucial for others can provide different viewpoints and may revolutionized your thoughts. Generally, schools and colleges are the best places for students to learn from each other. One example of mine is when I was in a biology class. My friends and I were preparing a presentation and suddenly one of person in my group mentioned frogs don’t have lungs, they breathe with their skins. However, not all of others agreed with this statement and we started doing research. Some look up the textbooks while others surf the Internet to find the most appropriate answer. Even though it was just a trivial statement, my friends and I were driven to find the real answer. Surprisingly, it only took us 15 minutes to find the answer and during the process when we did research, we had learnt more than we had in a three-hour lecture. Were it not for this studying group in my class, I wouldn’t have been so motivated and learnt so much in a short time.
Admittedly, learning is a matter of personal issue. If a student is apathetic about gaining knowledge and he or she cannot find meanings by doing so. There is nothing can motivate he or she, let alone school or college.
However, it is not always that case. Normally, students desire to find their interests and school and college surely provide motivation to help them to do so. Since places like school and college are perfect for students to drain knowledge and discover what they yearn for as well as a universal platforms for students to learn from each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, kind of, such as, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2503.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03621730382 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70553497799 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480885311871 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6353956729 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7037037037 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4074074074 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18518518519 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395089178676 0.243740707755 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119810457986 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165685926753 0.0758088955206 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261094270221 0.150359130593 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942481526173 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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