Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.
While some people tend to think that students have to learn by their discipline, and school or college cannot incite them to study, others seem to disagree with it. In my opinion, I believe that students can be motivated by school or college.
To begin with, students have lots of pressure from their classmates or friends who study with them at the same time. To be specific, they will want to study hard, and they can get the best grade from their classmates. For example, I and my friend, Alex, are classmates in my senior high school. When I knew he studied hard to get the good grade in the science class, I thought I cannot lose at that time. I started hard from then on. I eventually got the grade in the science class. Even though I did not win, I still have lots of sense of complishment from it, and I have lots of motivation from school. Thus, I think school can truly incite students.
The second point is that the requirement of school or college is the motivation to the students. That is to say, Lots of courses and basic requirements from school and be motivation to students. Most of the students want to finish their academic perfectly. If there are lots of requirement for students, they will learn lots of information about how to finish the them. The requirement naturally be the motivation to the students. Is is benefit to students since they can learn lots of different things.
True, some people might say that students cannot be incited by school, since lots of awards from the school are pertain the academic, these awards cannot allure them. However, this belief foos to consider the fact that there still have lots of students care about their grade and performance. It is important for students to get the awards from school, bacause they can be motivated if their friends or family see their awards. Therefore, it is hard to convince people of this idea.
To sum up, with the reasons mentioned above, I think that students can truly be incited by school or college because they care about their grade, and most of them have responsibilties to finish their academic. There seems to be some validity to other points of view. Hoever, I still believe that the reasons of my opinion are stronger.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun requirement seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of requirements'.
Suggestion: lots of requirements
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'them'?
Suggestion: the; them
...lots of information about how to finish the them. The requirement naturally be the motiv...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Is
...ally be the motivation to the students. Is is benefit to students since they can lear...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'pertained'.
Suggestion: pertained
...ince lots of awards from the school are pertain the academic, these awards cannot allur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, of course, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67848101266 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46970297469 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412658227848 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4259685534 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.347826087 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1739130435 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265206895949 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890248359741 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764310603207 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192283531026 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878566116308 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.1392134831 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.38706741573 81% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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