In any profession — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement claims that in any profession, such as business, politics, education and government, those in power should step down after five years. However, I firmly disagree with this statement and I shall elaborate my thoughts in the following essay.
To begin with, professions mentioned in the statement are always confronted with long-term issues that may take more than five year to handle. Therefore, if people in charge are replaced as their tasks remain unsettled, their successors are burdened and may not be able to handle them gracefully. Take education in Taiwan, for example. Taiwanese education is a long-term policy. Children receive education at the age at 6 and are told to attend schools for at least 9 years till they finish high school. However, if a school starts an experimental plan for a selected group of children, observing their behavior from the time when they enter a school to after high school, they would be replaced even before the can review the results. Also, if people who take over their positions don’t understand what they are doing, the successors simply will have difficulty continuing their plan. Therefore, the plan becomes a dead-end and can never be carried out.
Secondly, professions such as politics and business require long time experiences to master. Since the society nowadays changes so fast and dramatically, people rely on those in power to guide them to the right direction. Take Apple, the largest 3C company, for example. Imagine Steve Jobs leave the company after he just introduced us the first generation of Mac in 1980s? If he did, would his successors continued his great achievement? Since people consider Steve Jobs one of the most influential figure in the field of innovation, we cannot imagine what if he stepped down and decided not to lead his company. Also, our society is becoming smaller due to the globalization. It is impossible to be fully isolated to other countries. Therefore, the government requires a group of loyal, persistent people to deal with multiple international issues since these issues are complex and need experienced experts’ assistance. Five years is not enough to train another group of people with the same or even better expertise.
To sum up, as mentioned above. I firmly disagree with the statement which claims that in any profession like business, politics, education and government, those in power should step down after five years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
...troduced us the first generation of Mac in 1980s? If he did, would his successors contin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for example, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1783919598 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78944379617 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557788944724 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.5987807511 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6818181818 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0909090909 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200004006592 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556249391211 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116840263416 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201206275526 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156123108079 0.0667264976115 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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