Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?
With the advance of modern industrial development, advertisements are frequently used to attract people to make a purchase. However, some say advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need while others think it tells us about new products that may improve our lives. As for me, I believe that advertising provides useful products which actually improve my life.
First, with the advance of technologies, there are more and more useful products that claim to improve our life. Take learning knowledge, for example, such products are said to provide a more efficient way for people to learn certain subjects effortlessly. One of my experience can best describe this idea. When I was in high school I was tired of learning subjects in a tedious way, that is, sitting in classes and listening to teachers all day long. However, I saw an advertisement promoting a series of magazines which provided a more interesting way for people to learn. That was the product I would like to purchase; therefore I bought an English-learning magazine. I was impressed since the book not only taught me vocabularies or grammar, it also introduced a lot of English culture, arts and history. I was fascinated with the informative content offered by this magazine and my English skill had progressed dramatically. Thus, advertising does tell us a brand new products which can benefit our lives.
Second, in addition to offering learning material, advertising also arouse people's awareness of their well beings. Such as advertisements that talk about exercising or balanced diets allows people to be more cautious of their bodies. I used to suffer from back pain for a week, it was painful that I could barely slept well. Nevertheless, when I was waiting for my doctor in a hospital, I saw an ad which happened to discuss about back issue of modern people, which including long-time siting, imbalanced diets and lack of exercising. I was impressed because what the hosts talked about was exactly what happened to me recently; therefore, inevitably, I had a back injury. The ad introduced an exercising equipment and showed a short clip of how to use it. I ordered it online as soon as I came home and miraculously, my back recovered from pain within a week. I was glad that I saw the advertisement.
To sum up, by providing useful products and improve our lives, advertising is favorable to people. In a word, advertisements not only offer better learning materials, but also provide products that are beneficial to our health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[3]
Message: Did you mean 'to while'?
Suggestion: to while
...o buy things that we really do not need while others think it tells us about new prod...
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Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a tedious way" with adverb for "tedious"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...school I was tired of learning subjects in a tedious way, that is, sitting in classes and listen...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'sleep'
Suggestion: sleep
...eek, it was painful that I could barely slept well. Nevertheless, when I was waiting ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, for example, in addition, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99290780142 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01158836892 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539007092199 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7101798112 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312657482693 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937540943506 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156688182807 0.0737576698707 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245749652559 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.20727374943 0.0645574589148 321% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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