Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
New commodities and technologies are developed every day which provide us a wide range of options to choose when we are purchasing something. Personally, I believe that ads help us to know about what is new in the trade facilitating us to make decisions for what is more beneficial. I feel this way for the following reasons.
Firstly, the main function of merchandising is to inform people about the availability of something. Otherwise, how we would know this. The announcement should achieve the public that the product was made for, it can be made online, on TV shows or with leaflets, posters and billboards. For example, last month went to the beauty store to buy a new shampoo. There were a lot of types of products that I got confused to choose the best option. Then I remembered the publicity made by a digital influencer, therefore, I recognize the shampoo immediately when I saw it. How can I choose it if I was not informed that it exists?
Secondly, modern goods may enhance our everyday lives and tasks. Home appliances are one of these types of equipment that can facilitate our household work, hence more sophisticated and up-to-date they are better. My own experience demonstrates this, last year my mother was very upset with her vacuum. When she saw a TV advertisement telling about a new more potent, silent and smaller one she decided that she needs to purchase it.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that we just know about essential supplies when are informed. Therefore, achieve the public and upgrade their lives is the goal of advertising.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89179104478 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90999565949 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60447761194 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9619737027 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.9375 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153408137517 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413277713512 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362961918522 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0840971093026 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356530642491 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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