In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author propounds that since the lowering of speed limit has failed, Prunty County should use measure used by Butler county in order to increase the road safety. The author makes this suggestion hastily without making a cogent case. More data is need to make a sound judgment.
Firstly, the author invites us to believe that, by saying the measure taken by Butler country will work for Prunty County, the counties are essentially the same. However, no data is provided to establish this contention. It may be true but we do not know. May be the two counties are different in size, and population. It also may be the case that roads going through butler country do not have same amount of traffic as the Prunty County does. If it true, then then conclusion rendered baseless. Therefore, adapting the method to increase road safety for Prunty County might now work.
In addition, The author claims that the decreasing speed limit has failed and increasing the lane widths and resurfacing road will decrease the amount of accidents. The does not provide enough data to support that claim. There is no relation made between the width of the road and safety. Furthermore, there no evidence given on how the current method of lowering speed limits has failed. Perhaps the author could provide some statistical data before and after the current method was implemented.
Furthermore, the author mentions that there were 25% less accidents in Butler county than five years ago, despite their higher speed limits. But the question is, is 25% a significant amount and does the data from five years ago still valid today? The author should provide relative statistical data to substantiate this claim. It may be the case that 25% decrease is not enough, if the actual number of accidents is still 50 or 100 from 200 or 400 as compared to the number five years ago.
In conclusion, the author has made a unjustified claim without providing sufficient data which would allows the reader to evaluate the argument. The author need to provide substantial amount of data or at least the one mentioned above to support their claim. This will help to strengthen their argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1750 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.768 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.38 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.682 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.576 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... It may be true but we do not know. May be the two counties are different in size,...
^^
Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: different
...o not know. May be the two counties are different in size, and population. It also may be the cas...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'amounted'.
Suggestion: amounted
...through butler country do not have same amount of traffic as the Prunty County does. I...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'trues'?
Suggestion: trues
...raffic as the Prunty County does. If it true, then then conclusion rendered baseless...
^^^^
Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: then
... as the Prunty County does. If it true, then then conclusion rendered baseless. Therefore...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thermore, there no evidence given on how the current method of lowering speed lim...
^^
Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...question is, is 25% a significant amount and does the data from five years ago st...
^^
Line 9, column 36, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
.... In conclusion, the author has made a unjustified claim without providing suf...
^
Line 9, column 102, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...t providing sufficient data which would allows the reader to evaluate the argument. Th...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed to provide substantial amount of data or at least the one mentioned above to s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, at least, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92098092643 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45919410872 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512261580381 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1557816243 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0909090909 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6818181818 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160312323102 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475841221358 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506446523125 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929584815559 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490637792443 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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