The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.
The author here is stating that the autonomy of a country is defined by the strength of the borders. If the border's are weak than a lot of illegal immigrants can enter a country and they start to settle here and work and earn their bread."Vhen they are illegally settled in a country they are rising the competation in the job market and even it gets hard for golernment to keep a track of its very own population.the author here just wants to send all ofthe illegal immigrants back to their ot•m county.
However the reasons he has made to send them back are not strong enough. Firstly the statement that the autonomy of any country is based on its border strength is highly an overstatement which is totally based on his personal assumption. There are other key factors too on vchich the countries autonomy depends such as its international relation, international reputation , its economy , leaders and many more things. obviously border strength is one important thing but it is not the only important thing.
Secondly the statement that if number of illegal immegrants entering a country cannot be checked than they are threath to the economy and national identities. Doesthat mean that illegal immegrats should migrate but we should be able to keep a count of them.lt is clearly a weak statement based on his own assumptions that a countr might be endangered because of the immigrants and not by other big threath.This again is a very weak and unsubstantiated claim and does not demonstrate any correlation between the entry of illegal immigrants and there being any danger to the economy and national identity of the country. In fact, ifthe argument had an example lending support to this claim, then the argument would have been a lot stronger
Finally, the argument concluded that as these "illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country". From this conclusion, it isit clear how these illegal immigrants pose such a threat? Without pro'.åding any supporting ethdence and examples of instances where these illegal immigrants may have threatened the autonomy, the economy and the national identity of the country. One is left the impression that this is a far-fetched unsubstantiated claim vehich clearly cannot stand on its ovn.
In summary, the argument is flawed and utterly uncom.'incing. It could have been considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts and provided the correct examples. In order to comment on such a topic, it is extremely important to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 22 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2128 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.728 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.243 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... immigrants back to their ot•m county. However the reasons he has made to send them ba...
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Line 6, column 12, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...tally based on his personal assumption.There are other key factors too on vchich the...
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Line 6, column 58, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...are other key factors too on vchich the countries autonomy depends such as its internatio...
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Line 6, column 145, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ional relation, international reputation , its economy , leaders and many more th...
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Line 6, column 159, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
..., international reputation , its economy , leaders and many more things. obviousl...
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Line 7, column 23, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Obviously
...conomy , leaders and many more things. obviously border strength is one important thing ...
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Line 10, column 83, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...immigrants and not by other big threath.This again is a very weak and unsubstantiate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in fact, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15581395349 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97667454544 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 128.078897878 57.8364921388 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 158.357142857 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7142857143 23.324526521 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 5.15768463074 349% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.484094419489 0.218282227539 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130310989113 0.0743258471296 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101927933172 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126889075971 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0944956051402 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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