The memorandum form the business manager states that due to the increase in coverage of the national news the time for weather and local new has reduced. Due to this many people have complained of the reduction and the local business have also canceled their advertising contracts. To reduce further loss of viewers and advertising revenue, the channel should revert back to it's old format. I disagree with the memorandum as it has made unwarranted assumption, which I have discussed below
First, the business manager doesn't provide any number for the complains received regarding the lack of coverage on weather and local news. It just states that most of the complains were regarding the decrease in coverage. Most could mean anything, if the number of complains are only 5, then most could mean that 3 complains were regarding the lack of coverage, which doesn't seem convincing to revert back to the old format. If the bussiness manager would have provided an actual number of complains, it would have strengthned their arguement.
Second, the business manager makes the assumption that due to the lack of coverage of weather and local news, the local business have cancelled their advertising contracts. The business manager had just correlated two things with no substantial proof of it. There could be other reasons due to which the local business might have canceled their contracts. If the manager would have provided proof that the linked the decrease in coverage lead to the business cancelling their contracts it would make his claim valid and worth debating over.
Finally, the producer assumes that reverting back to the old format would increase more viewers. No where in the memorandum is it mentioned that due to the change in format the number of viewers decreased. Instead, it could be that dues to the new format the viewers might have increased and reverting back to the old one would result in losing them. The business manager has made a baseless claim with nothing to back it. If the manager provided statistics of the number of viewers decreased due to the new format it would have buttressed his argument.
In summary, as the proposition stands it holds no water as it is based on unwarrented claims and little going for it. Till the manger doesn't provide concreate proof and statistics, reverting back to the old format would be a gamble which very few odds in it's favour.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1558 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.779 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.463 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.807 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
First, the business manager doesnt provide any number for the complains re...
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Line 1, column 369, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e regarding the lack of coverage, which doesnt seem convincing to revert back to the o...
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Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reverting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: reverting
... coverage, which doesnt seem convincing to revert back to the old format. If the bussines...
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Line 1, column 451, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...he old format. If the bussiness manager would have provided an actual number of complains, it would...
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Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...anceled their contracts. If the manager would have provided proof that the linked the decrease in c...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: Now
...old format would increase more viewers. No where in the memorandum is it mentioned...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...baseless claim with nothing to back it. If the manager provided statistics of the ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it would have buttressed his argument. In summary, as the proposition stands it...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...nd little going for it. Till the manger doesnt provide concreate proof and statistics,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, then, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94427244582 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51116992048 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445820433437 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.557896048 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.466666667 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330409224784 0.218282227539 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12887960902 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11483161278 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191051729722 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128463190322 0.0628817314937 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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