"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The main focus of this passage is reducing the number of accidents because of huge flow of vehicles in summer season in Balmer Island. By following a strategy of Seaville Island, the possible solution is limiting the number of rentals of mopeds, considering by the town council. Mopeds are a popular form of transportation in Balmer Island. Is this really helpful for reducing accident?
First of all, during the summer season, almost 100,000 populations are increased. But there is no clear clarification about this abundant population in a particular season. It may cause for tourist or other occasions. In this time, with an increasing number of population, it must be demanded huge number of transportation for movement. So, reducing the vehicle is not a good solution.
Secondly, there is no nation where operate only one type of vehicle. If so, then this particular type of vehicle demand is too high. As well as town council must be provided this facility as much as needed. In Balmer Island, moped is a popular vehicle then it must be chosen by people most. So reducing moped is not a wise decision. It may hamper or lose the value of this Island. In case of reducing moped is demanded more vehicles for tourist movement. Lacking transportation can create bad impact on this place.
Last of all, town council almost sure that by following Seaville’s transport strategy may run well in his Island to solve the problem. But it is not considered that in what situation Seaville’s council took this decision. The scenario of two Islands may not be the same. There are huge possibilities of different number population, Tourism fact, vehicle’s popularity and many other factors in two Islands. Thus, if the Balmer town council wants to reduce accident level in summer season, he/she must conduct a proper study to find out the main reasons of accidents. It may cause for the- 1) lack of proper training of mopeds driver, 2) lack of proper facilities of pedestrians, 3)Lack of public awareness 4) lack of driving license 5) congestion of road and so on.
The author's conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further the author must provide better concrete reasons. It could be considerably strengthened if author mention all relevant facts. In order to assess the merit of several situations, it is essential to have good knowledge about the contributing factors. As a result, the author's conclusion has no legs to stands.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1973 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.8 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.743 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.679 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.243 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.395 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
The main focus of this passage is reducing the number ...
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Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ucing accident? First of all, during the summer season, almost 100,000 populations are increas...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e 5 congestion of road and so on. The authors conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... contributing factors. As a result, the authors conclusion has no legs to stands.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, as to, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00243902439 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90770684079 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514634146341 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1257430474 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.25 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6428571429 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03571428571 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326713580281 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827579619923 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090145070094 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184305274038 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125814379218 0.0628817314937 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.197005988 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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