The Bayside citizen want to consider raising local taxes to improve the performance of the students studying in the bay side school district. The conclusions are based on assumptions that the school in New Harbor which is located across the bay has a stronger student performance as compared to the students studying in bay side. The assumptions further state that the sole purpose of this discrepancy is due to the lack of infrastructure in bay side school. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated three questions must be answered.
Firstly, the author believes that only good infrastructure is the key to the success of the students in New Harbor schools. There might be a chance that schools with even better infrastructure than the school in New harbor produces less convincing results compared to them. If infrastructure only factor contributes to the success then the suggestion seems to be incomplete and the author needs to shed light on this assumption to prove it to be significant.
Secondly, he fails to acknowledge the quality of professors and teachers. What if the teaching faculty in bay side school is less qualified and have lesser experience than those that are been compared. If this seems to be true then the considerations of the author are too specious and drawing results on this basis hold no water. The author should consider equal parameters before comparing the results achieved by one with the other.
Lastly, the author doesn't provide any information whether the raised money will be used solely for the improvement of the infrastructure and would not be used in any development of roads, bridges or for that sake anywhere else. If it turns out the taxes raised are used in some other activity the sole purpose of improving the infrastructure of the school is isolated and thus getting the desired results is a distant thing.
If any of these scenarios has merit, then the conclusion is significantly weakened. In conclusion, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer these questions offer more evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to raise taxes to improve the grades of students studying in the bay side school.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 1902 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.953 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.924 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.979 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The Bayside citizen want to consider rai...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d to the students studying in bay side. The assumptions further state that the sole...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ool. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated three question...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed three questions must be answered. Firstly, the author believes that only g...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion to prove it to be significant. Secondly, he fails to acknowledge the qu...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...esults achieved by one with the other. Lastly, the author d...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... Lastly, the author doesnt provide any information whether the rai...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...desired results is a distant thing. If any of these scenarios has merit, the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to raise taxes t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07310704961 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96965682754 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498694516971 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1495067472 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.4375 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213654723815 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778575267472 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117139923716 0.0701772020484 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116972720645 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764284030013 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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