A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
Recently health experts have investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates and the reduction in the cases of headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia. They have claimed that the reduction in the cases of headaches is related to the consumption of salicylates based on a twenty-year study involving study participants and also because of the increased consumption of processed food products like preservatives which contain salicylates in them, residents of Mentia will suffer from fewer headaches in future. However, before jumping to the direct conclusion, certain questions which could oppose the study need to be answered.
Primarily, the experts assumes that all the cases of headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia are been logged down, headaches being a minor ailment, many of those who suffer may be using some home remedies or taking a pill like aspirin rather than visiting a doctor. There is no mention of the study taking this into consideration, failing to which may distort the assumptions of the health experts. Secondly, the study doesn't mention about the sample of study participants, maybe only a handful participants were taken into consideration and thus drawing similar results for all the residents of the city is too specious. Hence the question of sample size of the study must be answered. Also there is a possibility that the participants chosen for the study may be healthy and didn't face any stress problem, which is one of the major reasons of headache. Therefore, the study must answer to the questions regarding the pre-existing psychological health of the participants . Last but not the least, the experts have assumed that all or most of the residents of Mentia consume processed food. But there isn't any evidence provided to support this premise. What if only a small percentage of the number of residents prefer processed food? This tends to weaken the assumption that predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
In conclusion, the study, as it stands now is considerably flawed. If the health experts are able to answer the above questions and offer more eviodence, perhaps in the form of a systematic research study, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the prediction regarding the reduction in the number of cases of headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1969 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.82 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.04 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.49 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18911917098 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87707503846 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481865284974 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.9852007758 57.8364921388 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.533333333 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306255804089 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976668044344 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114469884563 0.0701772020484 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21693620938 0.128457276422 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113435726226 0.0628817314937 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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