The article published in the health magazine, states the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause of deteriorating fitness amongst the citizens of Corpora and it is also stated that fitness levels will improve when the economy recovers. The author has come to the conclusion based on the facts that Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. The author claims these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest and using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, some questions must be answered.
The author mentions that twenty years ago the citizen of Corpora were fitter than they are considered now. This might be because of the changing standards that define fitness level. Maybe back then someone who is just in the normal BMI range was considered fit and at present a person's breathing capacity, health conditions etc. are taken into consideration. There is a possibility that if the standards were same as before the results obtained were similar to that found twenty years ago. If this is true then there is no sign of decline in health.
Moreover, the author assumes that household having computers are having high fitness. But, there is a chance that the these citizens were even more fit before they owned a computer and now their fitness is declining, sufficient enough to be called fit. If this is true, the assumptions made by author is too vague as of now and certainly a more detailed study on this aspect may clear the air.
Furthermore, the author states higher spending on fitness-related products and services may increase the fitness level. But, what if the citizens of Copora already own some or the other form of equipment required to workout and prefer working out at in their home. Thus, investing more on fitness services like opening gyms could not attract any customers and thus the sole purpose of enhancing the fitness level is not achieved. If the author mentions about the wiliness of the people to join gyms or other fitness services, the results could be properly drawn.
Adding to the previous point there might be a possibility that citizens have already enrolled in some form of fitness program like a gym, zumba or in that case any other service but are not getting the time or lazying around to practice it everyday. Therefore, there is no point of spending on fitness service if people aren't willing to go regularly. This too weakens the assumptions made my the author.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the above questions and offer more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability that the fitness of the citizens of Corpora will improve as economy improves.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 537 350
No. of Characters: 2624 1500
No. of Different Words: 252 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.814 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.886 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.525 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 156 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.465 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 537, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...zens met the standards as then defined. The author claims these experts are mistake...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...similar to that found twenty years ago. If this is true then there is no sign of d...
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Line 9, column 241, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...e time or lazying around to practice it everyday. Therefore, there is no point of spendi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 321, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...f spending on fitness service if people arent willing to go regularly. This too weake...
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Line 11, column 202, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...above questions and offer more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2681.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 536.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00186567164 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57293841997 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 204.123752495 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485074626866 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.193285279 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.565217391 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3043478261 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315788783262 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803138848175 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139055905248 0.0701772020484 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147938767399 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142151325684 0.0628817314937 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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