In the article published in a health and fitness magazine the author claims that doctors should not recommend moderate exercise to their middle aged men patients but should instead encourage vigorous outdoor exercise on a daily basis. The author concludes this based, on a research studying the effects of exercise on longevity on 500 middle-aged men over a 20-year period where subjects represented a variety of occupations in several different parts of the country and responded to an annual survey where certain questions relating to their exercise routine were asked. But, this research seems to be ostensible and needs a set of further research and questions being answered to come to a valid conclusion.
Primarily, the research does not mention anything related to the present data. Are all the 500 subjects alive or has anyone deceased? If some have died, to which category did they belong to? Did they exercise moderately or vigorously? Failing to answer these questions, the research seems to be incomplete and drawing results based on past data is illogical. Perhaps, a better understanding of this could be acquired if the author shares the data on the present situation.
Secondly, the author claims that doctor should recommend middle aged men to exercise vigorously. But, what if the patient is suffering from health disorders like asthma, hypertension or any other disorder in which heavy breathing could exacerbate their health. Recommending them to vigorous exercise is risky and thus drawing results by claiming to gain results by heavy exercising contradicts the conclusion of the author and the author should provide data on this.
Thirdly, the author assumes lack of exercising to be the primary reason for reduced lifespan. But, the author fails to consider various other aspects that could deteriorate one's health. What if the subjects involved in heavy exercising does follows an unhealthy dietary plan? What if the subjects are heavy smokers and drinkers along with exercising heavy? If this turns out to be true, their lifespan may reduce instead of increasing. The author should be able to answer these questions raised to justify his stand failing to which the conclusion seems to be specious.
In conclusion, the research results, as it stands now is flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. Perhaps, if the author is able to answer the questions raised in this argument and can strengthen his stand with data perhaps in the form of research study then, it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability as to recommend the middle aged men to do vigorous exercise to increase their lifespan.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2178 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.077 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.855 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.522 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 429, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...represented a variety of occupations in several different parts of the country and responded to a...
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Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...us other aspects that could deteriorate ones health. What if the subjects involved i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16898148148 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69407750938 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49537037037 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0842610572 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247277338028 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686568515944 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851024103045 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143657878721 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112832105527 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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