Blue Highway and Green Highway
The opponents of motorists' lobby's plan to widen the Blue Highway recommend that they add a bicycle lane instead in order to ameliorate the highway's traffic issue. They suggest this based on worsening of traffic jams on Green Highway upon adding a lane as well as the residents’ penchant for bicycling. However, before the argument can be properly evaluated, one would require answers to the following questions.
Firstly, are Blue Highway and Green Highway similar? The proponents of bicycle lane prematurely assume that the circumstances from Green Highway can be used to generalise and make predictions for the Blue Highway. However, such considerations can prove to be malignant. There is a possibility that the Blue Highway and Green Highway are remarkably different in that while the Blue Highways meanders through the sparsely populated pastoral landscape, the Green Highway runs through the densely populated urban city. Furthermore, it is possible that the Blue Highway is in its pristine condition whereas the Green Highway requires an overhaul at periodic intervals. If either of the scenarios has merit, then the bicycle lane proponents' argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, do most of the residents using Blue Highway reside within the distance that can be travelled by a bicycle? The residents may prefer bicycles over motorcycles to commute to work everyday. However, it is possible that their commute is so long that they have to prefer motorcycles over bicycles even if they do not want to. As mentioned above, if the average distance to be travelled is 10 kilometers if not more, then the bicycle lane proponents' recommendation will not serve the purpose of alleviating traffic issues on Blue Highway.
Finally, how safe is it to add a bicycle lane on a highway? The proponents of bicycle lane fallaciously assume that using bicycles does not lead to any accidents. However, this assumption is spurious in that it is highly plausible that people commuting to work on bicycles will be in a haste and cause accidents on the highway. These accidents will only exacerbate the traffic jam issues. If this turns out to be the case after adding a bicycle lane, the bicycle lane proponents' prediction does not hold water.
Therefore, the argument, as it stands, is unpersuasive as the proponents of the bicycle lane do not provide any information that would help one evaluate the above posed questions. One will be in a better position to evaluate the argument if the bicycle lane proponents provide information addressing the above questions in a detailed manner leaving no room for ambiguity.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2149 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.068 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.799 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...les over motorcycles to commute to work everyday. However, it is possible that their com...
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Line 9, column 321, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a detailed manner" with adverb for "detailed"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ormation addressing the above questions in a detailed manner leaving no room for ambiguity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19575471698 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88474056903 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464622641509 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6863122642 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.15 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430499367121 0.218282227539 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174876236935 0.0743258471296 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.226272298773 0.0701772020484 322% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255564113909 0.128457276422 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.246842550958 0.0628817314937 393% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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