The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal."A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimul

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The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal.

"A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

There are many unwarrented assumptions based upon which the author forms the conclusion that so called "Palean" baskets were not unique to Palean. If any or all of the unstated assumptions doesn't hold good, then the author would be completely wrong. Let us go through these unstated assumption and see their implications on the conclusion if they don't hold true.

The author states that Palea boats hadn't been found. There is no mention of how exhaustive the archaeological survey had been. The survey must have been very limited in area. Had the survey covered lareger area to explore, the Palea boats might have been found which undermines the fact that Paleans had no chance of crossing the river as they did not have boats.

Rivers did not come into existence the very day the earth was formed. Rivers are formed by geological processes. Rivers that are teeming with water and aquatic life today might have once been a dry and parched land. The author didn't consider the history of the Brim River. When was it formed? How wide and deep was it when Palean people lived? The answers to the questions will definitely help us understand if the Palean ilks were able to traverse the land that is conquered by Brim River by other means. The author should also consider the fact that rivers can sometimes encroach the area they are flanked by as the time progresses. The Brim river must have washed away any remains of the boats used by Palean people due to which Paleans boats were not found.

What about the boats in Lithos? The author seems to have overlooked this question. It is possible that the people in Lithos had boats with which there were able to cross the river and bring back the Palea baskets as a result of which they were found in Lithos as well.

As we can see, there are many unstated assumptions which if doesn't hold true, the author's conclusion will by utterly wrong.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, then, well, as for, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 333.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77177177177 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35591279547 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501501501502 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.7803111452 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.45 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.218282227539 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0743258471296 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.128457276422 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.3550499002 149% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.197005988 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.9071856287 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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