In the editorial section of the local news paper, the opponents of the motorists' lobby suggest that a bicycle lane be added to Blue highway to reduce rush hour traffic. This recommendation was drawn based on the issues that plague Green highway after the addition of a new motorists' lane as well as the bicycling interest of the residents. This recommendation can however be properly evaluated if these three questions are answered.
Firstly, Do the residents who enjoy bicycling as a hobby live within a cycling proximity to their work place?. The opponents prematurely assume that they would be eager to cycle to work in the morning rather than drive, however this may not be the case. For example if the distance to their work place is over 10km and they have to pass through the highway to get there, they are then obligated to pass through the highway abet unwillingly. If the either of these scenarios is put into consideration, then the conclusion may be significantly weakened.
Secondly, Can green highway be compared to blue highway?. It is possible that Blue highway and Green highway are not analogous. Green highway may be located in an urban residential district while Blue highway may be located at a pastoral district with sparse population. It could also be that Green highway is the only highway that connects to the business district in the town while Blue highway has other alternative routes to the business district. Further, it is possible that Green highway may be in need of repair while Blue highway is in pristine condition. If this conditions are put into consideration, the argument will not hold water.
Finally, the opponents of the motorists' lobby are assuming that the issues that plagued Green highway last year are still in play. It could be that the Green highway had yet to install traffic lights along the highway after adding the new lane which could have have resolved already. It is also possible that there where spots along the highway in need of repair that caused the increased traffic surge. if the above stated scenario is true, it could weakened the recommendation.
In conclusion, as it stands, the argument is relatively flawed due to its inference from several unwarranted assumptions. If the above stated questions are put into consideration and more evidence is offered in the recommendation proposed by the opponents of the motorists' lobby, then the recommendation can be properly evaluated and become more persuasive.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2023 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.91 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.696 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.055 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: NEWS_PAPER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
In the editorial section of the local news paper, the opponents of the motorists lobby s...
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Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'motorists'' or 'motorist's'?
Suggestion: motorists'; motorist's
...een highway after the addition of a new motorists lane as well as the bicycling interest ...
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Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rict. Further, it is possible that Green highway may be in need of repair while B...
^^
Line 7, column 257, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: have
...y after adding the new lane which could have have resolved already. It is also possible t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...er adding the new lane which could have have resolved already. It is also possible t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...hat caused the increased traffic surge. if the above stated scenario is true, it c...
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Line 7, column 452, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'weaken'
Suggestion: weaken
...above stated scenario is true, it could weakened the recommendation. In conclusion, a...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03155339806 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79170849112 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461165048544 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5846327077 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.105263158 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6842105263 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.52322262079 0.218282227539 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.209014191152 0.0743258471296 281% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.235590287627 0.0701772020484 336% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26477088682 0.128457276422 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.231180796465 0.0628817314937 368% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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