The City Council of Smithville has recommended making changes to police procedures to improve the visibility of the police force. These changes include hiring more officers, budgeting more funds for police overtime, and directing officers to patrol significantly more often on foot rather than from their patrol cars. These improvements in visibility would significantly lower the crime rate in Smithville and make its citizens feel safer
The argument that increasing the police visibility will decrease the rate of crime in the city of smithville is compelling, and might even look logical at first glance. however, the author relies on unsupported assumptions to leap from evidence to conclusion. Therefore, the argument is fundamentally flawed and unpersuasive.
First, for any of the stated reforms to work, the recommendation should practically be enacted. Supposing the police department is infact reformed as per the council recommendations, there is still the question whether the sort of crime that happens in the city of smithville is controllable by merely increasing the police force. The rampant crime in the city might have been due to some other city policy that oppresses the poor man; the poor man might be stealing and breaking into houses to have his daily meal. increasing the police force would certainly demotivate criminals; however, we should not jump into conclusions that they will be compelled to abstain from commiting crimes. Instead, they might connive to circumscribe the legal barriers, which in this case is the increased police-force, and thus elude being captured. Unless there is clear evidence where increasing the police force has led to a decreased crime rate, at least in another similar city, we cannot leap from the given evidence to a fully formed conclusion.
Second, the basic argument of the author is challenged by the unfortunate truth that the police department could have been corrupted with venality or even fear of powerful criminals. All these reforms are based on the premise that each individual policeman is loyal to his profession and will do a proper job. Simply put, we cannot conclude that police visibility correlates with decreased crime. Once more, it boils down to an inadequecy of evidence. Had the author provided information that summarizes the track records of the smithville police officers, the argument would have been much more cogent.
In conclusion, the assertion would have been bolstered, had the author supported his claims of how the new reforms are actually going to decrease the crime rate in the city with appropriate evidence. Without adequate proof, the audience to this argument must be skeptical when acting upon it. While it is too extreme to call the argument untrue, it is definetely safe to consider the author's conclusion as a mere conjecture; a conclusion based on limited evidence. After all, the author's assertion might in fact be true, however, not due to the validity of his assumptions, but due to latent correlations between variables and subtleties that are not captured in the author's argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 428 350
No. of Characters: 2182 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.548 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.098 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.781 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.212 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ight even look logical at first glance. however, the author relies on unsupported assum...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 199, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...council recommendations, there is still the question whether the sort of crime that happens in the c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 517, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Increasing
...ing into houses to have his daily meal. increasing the police force would certainly demoti...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 385, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
..., it is definetely safe to consider the authors conclusion as a mere conjecture; a conc...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 481, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...sed on limited evidence. After all, the authors assertion might in fact be true, howeve...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 668, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...subtleties that are not captured in the authors argument.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, look, second, so, still, therefore, thus, while, after all, at least, in conclusion, in fact, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25934579439 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86271308585 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528037383178 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3583274767 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.055555556 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7777777778 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176328602104 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589403341242 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595568418826 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110551866552 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668792588518 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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