The passage claims that Kalinese artists have used moulds of actual bodies because remains of such moulds were found in the island and no sculpting tools and techniques were used. As a result, the miniature statues are different in style since life size moulds could not be used to create miniatures. In the end the passage concludes that life-size sculptures will loose their value while miniatures become more valuable.
First, the discovery of moulds of human head and hands on the island can mean that moulds were used in sculptures, however, there is no evidence provided that the sculptures were entirely made of clays formed by moulds. For example, It is possible that sculptures’ hands and heads were formed by moulds but the rest were formed by hand. Either the discovery of moulds created from other parts of body is required or more information on how other parts of human size sculptures were formed is needed to further strengthen the argument. To elucidate, if other parts are shaped by hand then their values may not deteriorate. Even if other parts are shaped by moulds it may still be of artistic interest and therefore valuable.
Second, it is mentioned by the passage that miniature statues’ were styled entirely differently this fact was used as an evidence to support the claim that no sculpting tools were utilised. To weaken the argument, one can say that since miniatures were created in another era than the life size statues and that is why their style is different. For example, Kalinese artists might have used very different methods, tools or artistic style many years ago and their tools and techniques could have evolved. Consequently, many year after creating miniatures they turned to creating life sized sculptures, therefore, the author could strengthen the argument by providing more information showing that the statues and miniatures come from the same era so that the comparison could sound more legit.
Finally, the article claims that life-size sculptures’ value will deteriorate as a result of these findings. This claim cannot be necessarily true maybe these finding make the statues more desirable to aesthetes since parts of human beings were used to create moulds that form clays, hence the sculptures resemble people from many years ago. As a result, historical significance of these sculptures may increase due to the fact that they look like ancient Kalinese, increasing their monetary value accordingly.
In conclusion, the author made claims based on finding on the island, however, much more information of sculptures’ historical context and production details are required to come the the conclusions that the author has made. Also, the author needs to be wary that sculptures should be looked at from various perspectives to better understand their value.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2308 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.061 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.521 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.283 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...oncludes that life-size sculptures will loose their value while miniatures become mor...
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Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'many years'.
Suggestion: many years
...iques could have evolved. Consequently, many year after creating miniatures they turned t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 185, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...production details are required to come the the conclusions that the author has made. A...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 185, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...production details are required to come the the conclusions that the author has made. A...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23245614035 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74590478254 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460526315789 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7855539448 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.352941176 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8235294118 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.82352941176 5.70786347227 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181702838891 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659320796726 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469101118034 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106053469062 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477002090048 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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