Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This discovery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in style: molds could be used only for life-size sculptures. It also explains why few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in value.
passage concludes that or proposes collectors predict that the life sculptures will descrease in value while the miniatures increase in value to support this conclusion author has come up with certain evidences.However on a deeper scrutiny it is revealed that none of the evidence land credible support to the conclusion let us scrutinize them further
Firstly,collector prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision.Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali ,we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies ,not sculpting tools and techniques ,to create these statues author may have missed the fact that it may be possible that kalinese artists are so dexterous and ept at their work of painting and sculpting that their art may seems real to them but its not and how can we say that the molds of human head found on kalinese island belong to that island only it may be of wanderer who had came from a different country.
Secondly,This discovery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in style:molds could be used for life-size sculptures author unfairley generalize that how could he conclude that molds used for life-size sculptures and Kalinese miniature statues were abstract their is no statestical proof of this conclusion on what basis he saying that these things are found.
Thirdly,author says that few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found author forgots that it maybe that only possible that only founded tools were very but at that time they use large number of tools to make sculpture .
after having seen the above discussion we come to know that the proposal has not been substantiated by the evidences provided by the author.The evidences hold inherent weakness.Thus ,the author must bring more data into consideration to make such conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 333 350
No. of Characters: 1675 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.272 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.03 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.506 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.388 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.489 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.929 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.269 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 325.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30153846154 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86162781851 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556923076923 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 22.8473053892 355% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 369.748140631 57.8364921388 639% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 430.75 119.503703932 360% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.25 23.324526521 348% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 22.0 5.70786347227 385% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402662602142 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185427200579 0.0743258471296 249% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.180229428517 0.0701772020484 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168021155443 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.195061187988 0.0628817314937 310% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.2 14.3799401198 307% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.74 48.3550499002 -22% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 12.197005988 286% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.64 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.06 8.32208582834 133% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 12.3882235529 460% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 11.1389221557 309% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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