Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. Opponents note that last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Their suggested alternative proposal is adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, it is argued, thereby reducing rush-hour traffic."
In this argument essay, authors state the issue related to the rush hour traffic on the blue highway. He claims that the traffic has doubled the commuting time for the commuters between the suburbs and the city. He suggests a solution of adding an additional lane for motorist’s lobby which Is then weaken by the opponents of the Green highway stating that; the same solution lead to traffic mess on the highway. This opponents come up with a proposal of adding a bicycle lane to blue highway as because many local are fond of bicycles. Thus reducing the rush hour traffic on the blue highway.
Firstly, the author states the rush hour traffic on the blue highway. For this the author fails to provide the sufficient information. The traffic on the blue highway might be because of the bad condition of the road. Also their might be possibility that the blue highway is surrounded by streets vendor leading a peoples rush on the highways causing traffic. The traffic may also be created because of the violation of the traffic rules ; such as disregarding the traffic signals, in appropriately changing the lane etc. In order to overcome the traffic author suggests a solution of widening the motorist’s lane on the blue highway. So before implementing this author must collect more statistics regarding the bikers. Such as what is the no. of bikers using the blue highway? How many bikers are using the highway during the peak time? If the no. of bikers is less than it would worthless of adding a motorist lane.
The author makes a counterpoint regarding the motorist lane by proving an evidence of the green highway. The green highway suffered a worsening of traffic after adopting the above stated proposal by the author; thus suggesting to add a bicyclist lane to reduce the traffic. As the proposal provided by the green highway worked for them , what is the possibility that it will also work for the blue highway. Green highway might be having a significant no. of bicyclists; thus adding an extra lane for them might helped them to lower the traffic. Also it might be possible that the workplace or offices of the people living nearby green highway is nearby their resident; thus enabling them to ride their bicycle to reach their destination. Though in order to implement this proposed solution the blue highway has to look forward for the above stated surveys. The green highway opponents states that the residents of blue highway are keen of bicycles. But this claim does completely fit to add an extra lane for bicyclist to reduce traffic. Even if the residents of blue highway are keen of bicycle, what if the food store or other daily required stores are far away , preventing them to make use of an alternative other than bicycle.
Finally, green highway exponents states that adding a motorist lane worsen their traffic. What if the added motorist lane if in adequate for the actual motorist using the green highway. Also are the motorist following the traffic rules. If the motorist are involved in rash driving which might lead to accidents more often thus creating traffic on green highways.
Thus the author needs to provide the above stated fallacy to strengthen his claims. He needs to provide sufficient information and current status of the blue highway to come up with an effective solution.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly, need to argue this:
Opponents note that last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it.
argument 3 -- not exactly, need to argue this:
Their suggested alternative proposal is adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, it is argued, thereby reducing rush-hour traffic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 566 350
No. of Characters: 2701 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.878 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.428 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 156 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.517 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.561 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.724 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.361 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.195 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a lane'.
Suggestion: adding a lane
...and the city. He suggests a solution of adding an additional lane for motorist's lobby which Is then...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 419, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...on lead to traffic mess on the highway. This opponents come up with a proposal of ad...
^^^^
Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...cause of the bad condition of the road. Also their might be possibility that the blu...
^^^^
Line 2, column 289, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'streets'' or 'street's'?
Suggestion: streets'; street's
... that the blue highway is surrounded by streets vendor leading a peoples rush on the hi...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 640, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...torist's lane on the blue highway. So before implementing this author must collect m...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 844, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...using the highway during the peak time? If the no. of bikers is less than it would...
^^
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggesting adding'.
Suggestion: suggesting adding
...ove stated proposal by the author; thus suggesting to add a bicyclist lane to reduce the traffic....
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ded by the green highway worked for them , what is the possibility that it will al...
^^
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...might helped them to lower the traffic. Also it might be possible that the workplace...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1163, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...other daily required stores are far away , preventing them to make use of an alter...
^^
Line 4, column 191, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... motorist using the green highway. Also are the motorist following the traffic rule...
^^^
Line 4, column 237, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e motorist following the traffic rules. If the motorist are involved in rash drivi...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...us creating traffic on green highways. Thus the author needs to provide the above s...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, regarding, so, then, thus, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2765.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 566.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8851590106 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.554765525 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.390459363958 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 847.8 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 19.7664670659 167% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2121406621 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7878787879 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1515151515 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78787878788 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460842068147 0.218282227539 211% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142647928192 0.0743258471296 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925566023279 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287656595802 0.128457276422 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147074613161 0.0628817314937 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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