In a controlled laboratory study of liquid hand soaps, a concentrated solution of extra strength UltraClean hand soap produced a 40 percent greater reduction in harmful bacteria than did the liquid hand soaps currently used in our hospitals. During our recent test of regular-strength UltraClean with doctors, nurses, and visitors at our hospital in Worktown, the hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection (a 20 percent reduction) than did any of the other hospitals in our group. Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations, including those used by visitors, throughout our hospital system."
In the above argument, the director asserts that using the high strength Ultra clean hand soap is an efficient way to banish the harmful bacteria quite comfortably. In this respect he upholds some inconsequential logics which can be broken in the sharpest way. No doubt there are a lot of qualms or reservations in the approach of the director and I wholeheartedly disagree with his demand of speech, which is why, I will exegesis in a pinpoint way.
To embark on, the director states that his discovered hand soap which stands on high strength can abate 40% harmful bacteria. In this context I have a full doubt. If we look at the evident, it seems quite erroneous as there is no clear sign or any evident of his demand. Rather his high strength soap is how much more strength than its previous one is not expressed here. As a result it is vividly well proved that his demand has a huge limitation to believe.
Furthermore, his strong point of this argument is that he boldly upholds that during recent test of regular-strength UltraClean with doctors, nurses, and visitors at his hospital in Worktown, the hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection which is quite 20% less than any other hospital. Turning to the other side of the argument, it is said that they survey patient of their medical and found minimized patients who are susceptible of this infection. Besides they asserted that its rate is 20% lower than any other hospital. Here I have a doubt, how they measure of other hospital scenario. Moreover, in such case neat and clear cut investigation to every hospital it is quite impossible to compare each and every medical’s new invention like soap. Likewise they surveyed how many patients in their hospital, it is not clearly expressed. So again a great flaw is predominant here.
Last but not least, the director opined that to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations, including those used by visitors, throughout our hospital system. If we look at this statement, it is full of hoax. In the previous portion his every demand has qualms. Now how he can tell that his discovered soap will reduce all infection. Moreover they will supply to all people . Here a big question is that why so many patients take if they are not attacked by such infection. Basically there is no clue how many people are impediments of this indfection. If it clear then we easily take decision that his demand is ok.
To wrap it up, we can conclude that obviously he did some measurement of his new soap but it can’t depict that his soap is satisfactory and can fill the demand of all. In othger context, this infection is how much dispersed everywhere is not clearly referred, so in such cases, we can’t tell properly that his argument is proved. Therefore it’s a rational to disbelieve it.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 494 350
No. of Characters: 2310 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.714 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.676 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.657 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.911 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.466 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a pinpoint way" with adverb for "pinpoint"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...f speech, which is why, I will exegesis in a pinpoint way. To embark on, the director states th...
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Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...lear sign or any evident of his demand. Rather his high strength soap is how much more...
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Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...its previous one is not expressed here. As a result it is vividly well proved that...
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Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... argument is that he boldly upholds that during recent test of regular-strength ...
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Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t is that he boldly upholds that during recent test of regular-strength UltraCle...
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Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Besides,
... who are susceptible of this infection. Besides they asserted that its rate is 20% lowe...
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Line 5, column 755, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...o compare each and every medical's new invention like soap. Likewise they surveyed how m...
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Line 5, column 780, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
...medical's new invention like soap. Likewise they surveyed how many patients in thei...
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Line 7, column 384, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...covered soap will reduce all infection. Moreover they will supply to all people . Here a...
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Line 7, column 423, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... Moreover they will supply to all people . Here a big question is that why so many...
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Line 7, column 603, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ple are impediments of this indfection. If it clear then we easily take decision t...
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Line 7, column 609, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'clears'?
Suggestion: clears
...e impediments of this indfection. If it clear then we easily take decision that his d...
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Line 9, column 341, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...l properly that his argument is proved. Therefore it's a rational to disbelieve it. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, if, likewise, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 28.8173652695 246% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 494.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84615384615 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78284129862 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495951417004 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.1447143473 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0769230769 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03846153846 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122692035892 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325332827183 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580780209635 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786714674502 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364238129283 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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