"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It is fair to impose such laws by the Batavian government on the farmers to regulate retail milk prices, but the authors argument does not make a cogent case to arrive at such conclusion, as this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to increased funding.
Firstly, the author claims the number of dairy farms throughout the country are 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. The authors conclusion mainly arises from this statement as it's base. The report obtained might be tainted due to improper collection of data. One digit makes a major difference in the conclusion and the authors claim is rejected. The data collected 10 years ago might not be as accurate as it seems due to lack of technology, man power, etc. Other factors like politics among the people governing the reports may lead to false reports. Accounting all such loop holes, the authors claim can be completely rejected.
Furthermore, the author states that the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. Taking this statement into consideration is completely absurd. The price of the milk is set by a private individual and not the government and taking such an example into arriving at a conclusion is unbelievable. The food market which might be owned by a person who does not belong to the governing body of that country has every right to implicate and alter the rate of the items of his shop. So the author cannot consider such examples and his stance in regulating the price of the milk doesn't stay as strong as it was before.
Finally, the author claims that the farmers are profiting from these hike in prices and the government should regulate the prices of the milk. If the data obtained from the reports is false and taking the private market prices into consideration, the notion to regulate the prices of the milk no longer stands. The author did not consider the increase in costs over the span of 10 years for the farmers. Though the dairy farms size kept increasing the amount of milk produced by each cow annually might have decreased. This maintains a steady production rate of milk with increase in the size of the cattle. The price of the food that the farmers need to provide for these animals might have increased in this span of time. This maintains a steady profit rate though the revenue generated is high than it was 10 years ago.
The prices of all the goods have significantly increased from the past 10 years due to increase in the taxes and others factors. To regulate the prices of the milk might decrease the profits of the farmers and might destroy their livelihood. Hence the author's argument is not likely enough to persuade the government into regulating the retail milk prices.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2265 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.632 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.412 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.227 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.881 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...to regulate retail milk prices, but the authors argument does not make a cogent case to...
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Line 2, column 129, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t greater than it was 10 years ago. The authors conclusion mainly arises from this stat...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 501, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., etc. Other factors like politics among the people governing the reports may le...
^^
Line 2, column 513, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... factors like politics among the people governing the reports may lead to false ...
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Line 4, column 624, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...nce in regulating the price of the milk doesnt stay as strong as it was before. Fin...
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Line 6, column 405, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r the span of 10 years for the farmers. Though the dairy farms size kept increasing th...
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Line 8, column 243, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ers and might destroy their livelihood. Hence the authors argument is not likely enou...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 253, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ght destroy their livelihood. Hence the authors argument is not likely enough to persua...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 488.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73360655738 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48368433033 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44262295082 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2876149941 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.434782609 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2173913043 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91304347826 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256443439937 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795112354904 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082968792534 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136682347669 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613396910385 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.