"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
According to the author of the letter, the production of milk has increased a lot since the past decade, while the prices of the milk raised from $1.5 to $3.0. Thus, the author argues that the Batavia should restrict the milk prices to reduce the excessive profits of the farmers. Nevertheless, some questions, concerning the cost of milk production, who raise the milk prices and the inflation, should be asked in order to evaluate the proposal.
First and foremost, the reason why farmers raised the prices is that the cost of milk production has increased. In modern milk production, we use some machines to produce milk from the cows instead of by workers hands. In order to buy this kind of high-tech machines, the farmers usually spend a lot of money on this, which may lead to the increased cost of milk production. Besides, the prices of cows may also increase.
In addition, there is possibility that it is not the farmers that raise the prices of the milk. Maybe the managers from the Excello Food Market raised the prices in order to seek more profits. They find that milk is of utmost importance of people’s daily lives and is indispensable, people will not stop buying the milk even if they raise prices. Accordingly, the managers decided to raise the prices because even if they raise money, the consumption of the milk will not decrease.
Furthermore, it may be the inflation that cause the raised prices. In the past decades, it is obvious that the prices of almost everything have experienced a huge raise from daily necessities like food to real estates. Thus, the farmers followed the trend of inflation by raising the price of milk in order not to reduce the profits. In the era of inflation, if the farmers do not increase the prices, the profits will become increasingly smaller and finally they can no longer to make a living on farming the cows and producing the milk.
In a nutshell, despite the decent intention of the author of the letter, several questions should be asked about why farmers raised the prices and who actually raised the prices in order to correctly evaluate the proposal of restrict the farmers’ profits.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1732 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.656 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.424 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.482 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.621 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, besides, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, while, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62268623011 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430107526882 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4492319069 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.375 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119889524029 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542740972967 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251397283389 0.0701772020484 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077588605533 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266787412408 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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