People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole
Someone holds the opinion that people’s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole. From my perspective, our attitudes are fundamentally shaped by our society through education, media and government policies and also determined the situations and surroundings in which we find ourselves.
Education is an important part of the society which determine our attitudes toward different matters surrounding us. Take the simple example of priority seats in public transportations. As a university student, we learn the social etiquette of offering the seats to those in need, for example, the pregnant, sick passenger, etc. Such practices are encouraged in the school based on a golden rule: treat the people the way you want to be treated. Our attitudes toward the fellow passenger are shaped by this rule through the education. Meanwhile, the society would also make sure our environment reflects the same principles that is consistent in our mind. For example, the priority seats are usually marked with signals to remind us of such etiquette.
In addition, our attitudes are also shaped by the social media that we are continuing encountering with. Through the excessive advertisements from everywhere around us, we are brainwashed that we are in need of those luxurious products. We come to believe that it is these extravagant goods that determine our values as human beings. Meanwhile, the society would shape the environment in the way that shopping will become much more convenient. For instance, through some shopping platform like Amazon and eBay, we have no longer to go out of our home and go to the shopping malls to buy some goods. Instead, we can just stay at home and wait the products we buy on the Internet to mail to us. Such arrangement, along with the advertisements and promotion in the media, reinforces the attitudes we hold toward the society.
Finally, the society also determine our attitudes through the government policies. In the past few decades, gay marriages have become increasingly acceptable in our society. It mat possibly due to the fact that most government adopts the policies of allowing homosexual marriages. At the same time, the change in government policies also stimulate the manufacturing of gay romance and wedding. New products are becoming available for homosexual couples to celebrate their anniversaries and weddings.
In a nutshell, I disagree with the idea that our attitudes are determined by our immediate situations or surroundings. On the contrary, our attitudes are shaped through education, media and government policies.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33651551313 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05123027788 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494033412888 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1743156171 60.3974514979 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.2173913043 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2173913043 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69565217391 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249405893486 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081620812001 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146893748409 0.0758088955206 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185610900389 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173490315271 0.0667264976115 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.