The department of Agriculture in Batavia reports the number of dairy firms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During the same period, however the price of milk has increased from $1.5 to $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing excessive profits The Batavia government should regulate retail milk prices.
The article conclude that the number of dairy firms in batavia has been increased by 25% over the ten year time period and the price of milk also appreciated from $1.50 to $3.00. As farmers are making excess profit and thus the government should regulate the retail price of milk. I think that the argument is logically flawed and it is not convincing enough for increasing the retail price of milk.
First of all, in a competitive market the price of any goods is determined by market forces. The demand and supply automatically adjusts to set the price of any commodity. In batavia, the price of milk has been changed over the 10 years period by demand and supply mechanism. over the 10 year period, the population has also been changed which ultimately resulted into change in demand of milk. In order to meet the increased demand the number of firms also increased. so, i am not agree about the writer's recommendation interfering in the market mechanism.
Secondly, inflation is also another factor which has contributed in the increase of milk price. over 10 year period, the inflation or price level in batavia has changed and to reflect of that price changes in milk price the milk price has also been altered. The price of items like food, vaccination, treatment cost, goods for making firms etc. has also been increased. therefore in order to reflect these price changes the milk price must also change. In this argument, the writer did not mention nothing about the price changes in Batlavia. if the other prices in the market changes then the milk price should also increased otherwise the farmers will incurred also. In his argument, without mentioning about these the writer only make recommendation for increasing the milk price which is illogical as well as irrelevant.
For making dairy firms, the farmers have to sacrifice other things. Because we know that the resources are limited and we have unlimited want. For feeding the cattle, the farmers might used the farming land for producing grass for cattle which is limiting the production of agriculture products. Due to increase in milk price, many farmers might shift to this industry by sacrificing agriculture. so if government took the decision of controlling milk price then many farmers may shift to another industry which ultimately resulted in reduction of supply of milk in the market. therefore, the decision of controlling milk price might have negative effect.
Finally, the argument is irrelevant and logically flawed. without analysing the actual fact, it is ridiculous to regulated the milk market. To strengthen the argument, the writer must provide concrete evidence to show that regulation have positive impact of milk production as well as on milk consumption.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2244 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.921 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.567 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.001 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
The article conclude that the number of dairy firms in batav...
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Line 2, column 276, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Over
... period by demand and supply mechanism. over the 10 year period, the population has ...
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Line 2, column 469, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...and the number of firms also increased. so, i am not agree about the writers recom...
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Line 2, column 473, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...the number of firms also increased. so, i am not agree about the writers recommen...
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Line 2, column 482, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...r of firms also increased. so, i am not agree about the writers recommendation interf...
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Line 2, column 498, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...increased. so, i am not agree about the writers recommendation interfering in the marke...
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Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Over
...tributed in the increase of milk price. over 10 year period, the inflation or price ...
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Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rice has also been altered. The price of items like food, vaccination, treatment ...
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Line 4, column 372, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ing firms etc. has also been increased. therefore in order to reflect these price changes...
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Line 4, column 372, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: therefore,
...ing firms etc. has also been increased. therefore in order to reflect these price changes...
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Line 4, column 500, Rule ID: NOT_NOTHING[1]
Message: Double negation. You probably should say 'anything'.
Suggestion: anything
...is argument, the writer did not mention nothing about the price changes in Batlavia. ...
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Line 4, column 545, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng about the price changes in Batlavia. if the other prices in the market change...
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Line 4, column 547, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... about the price changes in Batlavia. if the other prices in the market changes ...
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Line 4, column 621, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...changes then the milk price should also increased otherwise the farmers will incurred als...
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Line 4, column 658, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'incur'
Suggestion: incur
...so increased otherwise the farmers will incurred also. In his argument, without mentioni...
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Line 4, column 667, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...sed otherwise the farmers will incurred also. In his argument, without mentioning ab...
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Line 6, column 398, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...is industry by sacrificing agriculture. so if government took the decision of cont...
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Line 6, column 398, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is industry by sacrificing agriculture. so if government took the decision of control...
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Line 6, column 579, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...uction of supply of milk in the market. therefore, the decision of controlling milk price...
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Line 7, column 58, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...ent is irrelevant and logically flawed. without analysing the actual fact, it is ridicu...
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Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: ACTUAL_EXPERIENCE[1]
Message: Use simply 'fact'.
Suggestion: fact
...logically flawed. without analysing the actual fact, it is ridiculous to regulated the milk...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, i think, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2297.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03728070175 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64033539513 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427631578947 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5588768282 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3461538462 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222923759821 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738936302448 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707358399544 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14264379482 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753221160898 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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