"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-jo

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"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author indicated that shortens the work hours in three shifts could cut the on-the-job accidents effectively based on the comparison of the company nearby and the experts’ words. Although the evidence seems plausible, the author’s conclusions were potentially based on several assumptions, which when considered, if against the reality will damage the argument instead of strengthening it.

While the Quiot company had 30 percent of accidents in the last year, the data could not successfully represent the accidents happened more frequent unless we know the data about its history. Moreover, the author did not mention the Panoply Industries’ condition. However, as the basic fact which directly leads to the conclusion, the assumption lying in here is 30 percent means very high when compared the Quiot’s history, and even higher than the Panoply Company’s accident in the past year. Furthermore, the high accidents rate in the past year attributes to the one-hour-long work shift, which is the reason why the nearby company had fewer accidents rate. If all these assumptions mentioned and approved by the author, the conclusion can be regarded as reliable. However, none of them were mentioned. Therefore, the reasons that Quiot to learn from the nearby company are questionable.

Also, although the expert’s suggestion that the worker in sleep deprivation condition will increase the possibility of accidents when working, it does not necessarily mean the Quiot Company has the same problem in their workers. The author did not exclude the other situation affected the safety system. For example, many accidents happened because the workers in Quiot Company lacking skills and safety knowledge, then the first option to prevent the dangerous occurring again should have seminars and training section as an emergency instead of letting workers work less.

Last but not least, the the reason to change three shifts at one time is unwarranted, and even dangerous if put into practice immediately because without offering any evidence that the three shifts are the major reasons and changing it will not disturb other worker’s schedule, the conclusion will not only generate more accidents but also put other workers in related positions in dangerous situations too.

Therefore, even though the conclusion based on the data in the past years, the experts’ opinions, and the care to the workers, the suggestion is unreliable when taking a closer look. Unless we know the nearby company’s condition the comparison is unreasonable. Also, we need to know the experts’ suggestions and shifts changes are suitable in this situation.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51449275362 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98426896916 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531400966184 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.4336119592 57.8364921388 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.6875 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218362969051 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700362492721 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637670477232 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109904559433 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718581924147 0.0628817314937 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2168 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.237 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.656 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.962 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5