People who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it.
An idea is a reflection of one’s ambitions and goals which showcases ones perseverance to engender an idea and set their imagination to reality. The prompt suggests that individuals who are deeply adhering to an idea or a policy are the most critical about it to which i mostly agree but there are two faces to this suggestion and like assert that with following reasons.
To begin with, power of imagination is what gives fuel to an idea and the mindset of an individual propels that idea forward to become reality. Thus an idea is creation of one’s imagination and hope to bring it to reality, hope is a very dangerous thing it can make you or break you. For example, if a student with an idea of changing the education system which guarantees sufficient skillset without any exams seems idealistic but in reality the scrutiny of ones work gives a report which helps to find out area of improvement. Similiarly some aspects of idea might seem right but does not have practical application. To stretch our imagination and we came up with internet and providing online courses but even there one needs to take some sort of exam.
Ideas have ability to change the world with proper diligent efforts. An idea at once seem funny and people might ridicule it, but ones belief in there idea can change the world. For instance, 50-60 years back from now no one would have thought of banking to be a click away, sending money anytime anywhere. As it was believed to be a in person job which needs physical presence, but an idea of facilitating human lives engendered computer and internet through which anything is possible. These invention did not just came to us in our dreams but where the result of imagination power of human beings which came up with an idea and worked hard for it with bearing criticism at times and finally succeeding.
Sometimes human mind does not work efficiently and needs to be in certain restrictions for which people generally make some policies to work efficiently and be on track which reinforces their ability to think and work on a circumscribed path. Many times criticism and self pitying helps to get back on track with more energy and focus.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e’s ambitions and goals which showcases ones perseverance to engender an idea and se...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ls that idea forward to become reality. Thus an idea is creation of one’s imaginatio...
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Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ealistic but in reality the scrutiny of ones work gives a report which helps to find...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...funny and people might ridicule it, but ones belief in there idea can change the wor...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...time anywhere. As it was believed to be a in person job which needs physical pres...
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Line 5, column 489, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this invention' or 'These inventions'?
Suggestion: This invention; These inventions
...net through which anything is possible. These invention did not just came to us in our dreams b...
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Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'times'' or 'time's'?
Suggestion: times'; time's
... and work on a circumscribed path. Many times criticism and self pitying helps to get...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, so, thus, for example, for instance, sort of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7375328084 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58253579196 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543307086614 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4464709405 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.928571429 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2142857143 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245887670319 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883789442044 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090660890145 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16517143861 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115074673393 0.0667264976115 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.