ALL PARENTS SHOULD BE REQUIRED TO VOLUNTEER TIME TO THERE CHILDREN'S SCHOOLS

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ALL PARENTS SHOULD BE REQUIRED TO VOLUNTEER TIME TO THERE CHILDREN'S SCHOOLS

A child is raised by their parents and they follow the path directed by there parents, so role of parents in shaping there child’s future is significant and the parents should monitor there child’s burgeoning and should equally be a part of there natural opinion and rectify there fault as and when necessary until they are mature enough and are able to make there own decisions. After learning natural instincts from parents school is the most important place where a child learns about rudiments of life, in that also parents play an important role in deciding how the child performs in school depending upon how the school is. So the prompt suggests that parents should volunteer time for there children’s admission in the school as well as they should closely monitor there child’s performance to which I strongly agree as it is the most important aspect of a child’s future and which is not an tenuous decision. I agree to this due to following reasons.

To begin with a positive example, there are parents who are protective about there children’s future (though every parents are protective about there children’s except how much effort they put in for it matters) always takes decisions in co-ordinance with there child like in which school there children should study, which stream should they follow, how should they prepare for exams, do they need extra tutoring , which subject needs more attention etc. which helps child growth and works as a catalyst. To simplify this lets taken an example of a child whose parents admits there child in a very reputed and high ranked school after doing thorough survey in many schools and encourages there child in going to school. Just by getting admitted to school doesn’t makes a child’s future bright but requires constant monitoring by parents, which there parents did and helped the child in taking each and every decision. Children learn at very rapid rate and tend to adopt nature of others, so parents should monitor there child’s behavior and if they feel any sort action is needed a mild reprehension is also necessary to make them follow the right track in life.

Whereas parents who don’t volunteer time for there children’s life shaping decisions like schooling which could result in serious consequences like the children lacks creativity, imagination which hinders there thought process and makes the child more dull and which could lead to failure in school. So for simplification let’s say a child who’s parents didn’t really gave importance to the which school the child studies and admitted the child in the nearest public school which isn’t well reputed, though the child was creative and intelligent but was not able to perform due to lack of proper guidance from school and parents didn’t care that much monitoring child’s progress which led to failure in class. Which could cause serious consequences like child could loss interest in studying or even could lead to some bad influence like smoking, drinking alcohol, drugs etc.

So to conclude volunteering in child’s decision during schooling is very significant as it shapes the future of the child and which could lead to a positive and successful life. Parents should spare time for there colds schooling and stay updated about daily routine of there child. Even children should share there experiences in school which is rarely possible as the children are shy and reserved or might fear that the parents would castigate them because of there mistake, so parents should not discourage or beat there child instead should share there views and monitor there thoughts.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, well, whereas, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3107.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 597.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20435510888 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67360085272 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445561139028 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 915.3 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 23.0359550562 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.501923234 60.3974514979 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 207.133333333 118.986275619 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.8 23.4991977007 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261769559798 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117012871595 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760414742152 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209564636253 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586469998789 0.0667264976115 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 14.1392134831 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.8971910112 223% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.2143820225 157% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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