“on balmer island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the islands moped rental companies from 50per day to 25 per day during summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain 50 % annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island seaville, when seaville’s town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
In a letter to editor of the balmer island, the author asserts that due to augment in population in balmer island during the summer season the accidents on the island due to mopeds have also multiplied and the author has come to this conclusion based on the fact that the major form of transportation on balmer island is mopeds and as a panacea limited the rental of mopeds on the island of balmer. However before this argument can be fully evaluated, 3 questions should be answered with evidence by the author for analyzing.
First of all, as per the authors assumption that the increased number of accident is due to aggrandizement of population on balmer island and has caused increment in accidents due to mopeds and pedestrian which may not be the case and may be there are chances that accidents are increased due to accident by other form of vehicles like bicycle, car, truck, auto-rickshaw or even due to improper implementation of or lenient traffic norms on balmer island, for example, if a car meets with an accident with a bicycle due to lack of traffic signals on the balmer island which is not case in the statement and which cannot be resolved by restricting the renting of number of mopeds by 50 percent/per day if any of these scenarios are true then the conclusion drawn in the statement is significantly weakened.
Secondly, in th statement the author assumes that the restriction on renting of number of mopeds per day would resolve the issue and in result the council will achieve 50 percent reduction in accidents just like council of seaville island attained, but the authors assumption that the restriction on rental of mopeds in seaville island might not be effective on balmer island, because without any evidence on seaville islands size, population, type of roads and popular mode of transportation etc characteristics of seaville island cannot be generalized for balmer island. For example, if popular mode of transport in seaville island is cars contrary to mopeds in balmer island or the roads in seaville island are very congested due to which rental of moped is restricted which cannot be compared to balmer island without reinforcing evidence. So if any of the scenarios have any merit then the conclusion drawn in the statement is trivial.
To conclude, the argument, as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide any reinforcing evidence to the assumptions in the argument or provide required details then it would be possible to determine whether root cause of increased accident on balmer island is due to increased population or by reducing number of moped renting.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2207 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.861 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.803 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.443 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.457 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.673 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...t in population in balmer island during the summer season the accidents on the island due to mope...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cidents on the island due to mopeds have also multiplied and the author has come ...
^^
Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ntal of mopeds on the island of balmer. However before this argument can be fully evalu...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nalyzing. First of all, as per the authors assumption that the increased number of...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 632, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e statement and which cannot be resolved by restricting the renting of number of ...
^^
Line 9, column 258, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...il of seaville island attained, but the authors assumption that the restriction on rent...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 845, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er island without reinforcing evidence. So if any of the scenarios have any merit the...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 55.5748502994 153% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 453.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97350993377 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86587443227 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.403973509934 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 22.8473053892 245% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 233.106969812 57.8364921388 403% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 281.625 119.503703932 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.625 23.324526521 243% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.125 5.70786347227 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371532028116 0.218282227539 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172606840677 0.0743258471296 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139822785955 0.0701772020484 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255890975333 0.128457276422 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652259517698 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.3 14.3799401198 211% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.64 48.3550499002 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 12.197005988 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.4 11.1389221557 219% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 25.0 11.9071856287 210% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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