Essay Topic:
Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a state traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed. Members of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighborhoods. It would be better to follow the example
of the nearby city of Garville. Last year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was implemented, and people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably. There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh.
The following is letter to the editor of the Waymarsh Times. Author made conclusion that, traffic issue of Waymarsh solved if they follow example of nearby city of Garville. Garville implemented policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons of free of gas. There are several assumption made by author, which need specific evidences.
Firstly, Author state that Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming problem. In addition to this author further shown survey comparison before three year and current situation. Author mention that before three years typically driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes 40 minutes. Author need evidence, survey statistical data or record shows three years ago situation and current situation. Survey conducted by whom and how they reliable. Author need check, population rate whether increase or people prefer vehicle for travelling purpose. Author state that, Member of town council already have suggested more road building tp address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighbourhood. Author need evidence, whether Waymarsh town council have estimated cost. As mentioning expensive, author need mention how much it differ from estimated value. Author need evidence, when construction work held whether in day time or night time.
Secondly, Author state that it would be better to follow the example nearby city of garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share ride to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Author need to evidence, population of city, how much them are willing to drive vehicle. Author need evidence about, avilability of gas and need record which shows people benefited from the scheme. Author mention that, Pollution level in Garville have dropped since the policy was implemented and people from Garville
tell him that commuting time have fallen considerably. Author need statistical data about pollution level before applying policy and after applying policy. Author need evidence by implementing policy whether it really commuting time in what percent fallen. It might possibility that previously it takes 30 minutes now it takes 25 minutes, so it's now majorable fallen.
Thirdly, author state that there is no reason why a policy like Garville shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh. Author need evidence of both cities, their natural condition, availability of sources. It might possibility of people of Waymarsh are less attentive towards pollution, they lax in maintaining natural environment, while on other hand Garville people very conscious about there environment, they are well aware about pollution and it's drawback. we can't apply same policy to Waymarsh.
In conclusion, Author need to check all the point before making any conclusion. Author made several statement which need an specific evidence for strengthening arguments.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 16 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2427 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.322 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.513 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 203 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.326 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
... them coupons of free of gas. There are several assumption made by author, which need specific evi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...upons of free of gas. There are several assumption made by author, which need specific evi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ommuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes 40 minutes. Author need evide...
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Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... some of our residential neighbourhood. Author need evidence, whether Waymarsh town co...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 916, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'differs'?
Suggestion: differs
...ensive, author need mention how much it differ from estimated value. Author need evide...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 391, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...shows people benefited from the scheme. Author mention that, Pollution level in Garvil...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 56, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ommuting time have fallen considerably. Author need statistical data about pollution l...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 157, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lying policy and after applying policy. Author need evidence by implementing policy wh...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...is no reason why a policy like Garville shouldnt work equally well in Waymarsh. Author n...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 457, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...aware about pollution and its drawback. we cant apply same policy to Waymarsh. ...
^^
Line 8, column 460, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...re about pollution and its drawback. we cant apply same policy to Waymarsh. In co...
^^^^
Line 10, column 93, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun statement seems to be countable; consider using: 'several statements'.
Suggestion: several statements
...fore making any conclusion. Author made several statement which need an specific evidence for str...
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Line 10, column 122, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...uthor made several statement which need an specific evidence for strengthening arg...
^^
Line 10, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...c evidence for strengthening arguments.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4967032967 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61286793681 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50989010989 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6507950893 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6296296296 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8518518519 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.74074074074 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16994521802 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586211878776 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909922441709 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805518131727 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798200994689 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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