Essay topics: "Manned space flight is costly and dangerous. Moreover, the recent success of a series of unmanned space probes and satellites has demonstrated that a great deal of useful information can be gathered without the costs and risks associated with sending men and women into space. Therefore, we should invest our resources in unmanned space flight."
The follwoing argument is provided from a letter to the editor of an aeronautics magazine which proposed it will be better to send unmanned space probes and satellites to the space to avoid risks and costs associated with it, therefore the budget should be entirely allocated to unmanned space operations. The argument provided in the letter is not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
Due to the recent advancement of technologies, Unmanned space probes are a reality. But the argument assumes that manned and unmanned space operations are similar in terms of cost associated, the amount of information it will gather in similar time etc. It is far easier and less time consuming to train a set of astronauts to get the necessary information from the expidition than creating and sending an unmanned satellite to collect data from a similar outer space expidition. Unmanned space probes need extra time, money and maintainence to perform the same set of work.
Setting up resources to create and launch unmanned space programs are far more riskier. Though there are a handful set of examples of machine centered space operations, still the uncertainity will be far more than a mission designated and performed by humans. There should be simlutaneous space operations, which will be performed by both man and machine, to compare the yeild and cost associated with the task. Otherwise, it will be of high risk to set the entire budget limited to unmanned space operation.
The evidences provided to support the argument are incomplete and not convincing. Unmanned space operation need extra time, effort, and manpower; and the degree of uncertainity is far more than manned space operations. The argument might have been strengthened by inclusion of some logical surveys of cost and investments associated with the space operations, and some sort of risk assesments of the astronauts. Thus, the argument from the letter to invest resources in the unmanned space operations is not completely valid and sound.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The follwoing argument is provided from a letter to the editor of an aeronautics magazine which proposed it will be better to send unmanned space probes and satellites to the space to avoid risks and costs associated with it, therefore the budget should be entirely allocated to unmanned space operations.
Error: follwoing Suggestion: following
Sentence: But the argument assumes that manned and unmanned space operations are similar in terms of cost associated, the amount of information it will gather in similar time etc. It is far easier and less time consuming to train a set of astronauts to get the necessary information from the expidition than creating and sending an unmanned satellite to collect data from a similar outer space expidition.
Error: expidition Suggestion: expedition
Sentence: Unmanned space probes need extra time, money and maintainence to perform the same set of work.
Error: maintainence Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Setting up resources to create and launch unmanned space programs are far more riskier.
Error: riskier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Though there are a handful set of examples of machine centered space operations, still the uncertainity will be far more than a mission designated and performed by humans.
Error: uncertainity Suggestion: uncertainty
Sentence: There should be simlutaneous space operations, which will be performed by both man and machine, to compare the yeild and cost associated with the task.
Error: simlutaneous Suggestion: simultaneous
Error: yeild Suggestion: yield
Sentence: Unmanned space operation need extra time, effort, and manpower; and the degree of uncertainity is far more than manned space operations.
Error: uncertainity Suggestion: uncertainty
Sentence: The argument might have been strengthened by inclusion of some logical surveys of cost and investments associated with the space operations, and some sort of risk assesments of the astronauts.
Error: assesments Suggestion: assessments
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 329 350
No. of Characters: 1689 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.134 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.797 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.249 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.407 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 75, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'riskier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: riskier
... launch unmanned space programs are far more riskier. Though there are a handful set of exam...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, still, then, therefore, thus, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25227963526 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88570410489 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465045592705 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5797558174 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.428571429 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305041956223 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121844974448 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073217067665 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207943308767 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237076798494 0.0628817314937 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 12.3882235529 129% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.