Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The conclusion states that Omega university should terminate student evaluation of professors. based on the premises that Omega University implemented a procedure for its student to evaluate teaching effective ness of its professors. And due to that, professors started assigning higher grades to students, that made employers believe that dramatic rise in grades does not reflect studnet achievement and so Omega graduates are not as sucessful in getting job as Alpha graduates. This conclusion is exagerated by few assumptions that needs to be highlighted.
First of all, the Omega university implemented a new procedure nearly fifteen years ago and readers are make to believe that 15 years is very small time and the procedure's effects still exists. fifteen years is a long time. An effect of the procedure, which implemeted that long ago, may not be in importance now. If that is true it weakens the author's conclusion.
It is said that Omega professors started assigning higher grades to students. That statement is dubious, may be after the implematation of the procedure, professors started teaching effectively. The procedure may have motivated them to pay more attention towards learning of the students and hence students perform better in the exams and hence got good grades. It is unfair to say then that professors started assigning more grades. And if that is true, the statement that dramatic increase in grades does not reflect their achievement is unfair. This weakens the author's conculsion.
The author says that Omega graduactes have not been successful at getting jobs. And this is compared with the graduates of nearby Alpha university. This again again unreliable argument, the jobs may not nob as much as Alpha University graduates but may be better than many other Universities. We do not know about the earlier condition of getting jobs by the Alpha students. We also do not know the overall condition of getting jobs by new graduates. Also, it may be the case that Omega students are not interested in getting jobs as much as Alpha graduates do. May be Omega university graduates are inclined to start own endeavour. Thus, without this knowlwdge it is unreliable to draw the coclusion that Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors. Also what is the status of alumini of the University is also required, they may be more successful than Aplha graduates.
In sum, the conclusion drawn by the author which says Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors is weaken because of the reasons stated above. To make the argument strong, more knowledge on why students started getting good grades is required. Also, details of what is the overall job placements of new graduates would also help to make the argument reliable. What is the status of the aluminy of the university is also required.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2355 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.065 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.747 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 79 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.644 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Based
...inate student evaluation of professors. based on the premises that Omega University i...
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Line 2, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Fifteen
...nd the procedures effects still exists. fifteen years is a long time. An effect of the ...
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Line 2, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...long ago, may not be in importance now. If that is true it weakens the authors con...
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Line 2, column 345, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nce now. If that is true it weakens the authors conclusion. It is said that Omega prof...
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Line 4, column 153, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: again
...duates of nearby Alpha university. This again again unreliable argument, the jobs may not n...
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Line 4, column 774, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...inate student evaluation of professors. Also what is the status of alumini of the Un...
^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
...ate student evaluation of professors is weaken because of the reasons stated above. To...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, still, then, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 465.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16989247312 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81881592251 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421505376344 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.2906789924 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4615384615 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8846153846 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65384615385 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36713878381 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990208517207 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839549449537 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220277477885 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659749875989 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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