Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The author's conclusion to terminate student evaluation of the professor to improve the student’s achievement and get them placed is flawed. Author evidence that professors were assigning higher grades to get better evaluation from the student. Employers thought the rise was inflated and it was the reason behind the students being not successful as Alpha University. A meticulous analysis will show that certain evidence needs to be justified to validity.
First, the author implies the professor is assigning higher scores for getting better evaluation from the students. There might be numerous reasons for getting good grades to the student, which might be that the professor has adopted a new method of teaching that has benefited the students. Or the students might work extra hard to score the grades. Such evidence would weaken the author's argument that professors are giving higher grades to get better evaluations.
Second, authors imply students' higher marks will lead them to get placed. There are various factors for students getting placed such as the skills required for the particular job. It might be the case that the students of Alpha university have more skills and the university provides opportunities for overall development. Also the employer might seek the courses that are taught in the Alpha university and not in the Omega university. Moreover it might be possible that the curriculum of the Omega university is not updated and doesn’t match the current job market.
Comments
e-rater score report
flaws:
No. of Words: 239 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 239 350
No. of Characters: 1239 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.932 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.184 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.581 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.907 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors conclusion to terminate student evaluat...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... grades. Such evidence would weaken the authors argument that professors are giving hig...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... opportunities for overall development. Also the employer might seek the courses tha...
^^^^
Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ersity and not in the Omega university. Moreover it might be possible that the curriculu...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 55.5748502994 32% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1268.0 2260.96107784 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 238.0 441.139720559 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32773109244 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.56307096286 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65887717865 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 204.123752495 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508403361345 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 705.55239521 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5308483779 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.5384615385 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3076923077 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255682027913 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102857641649 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612093774631 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184843107823 0.128457276422 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141102531189 0.0628817314937 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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