Fifteen years ago Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors Since that time Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes and overall student

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Authors conclusion to shut-down the student’s evaluation of teaching effectiveness at omega university is based on the premise that Potential employer’s belive, the suddent rise in grades does not perfectly corresponds to student’s academic achievements and hence the students of omega university are lagging behind the students of alpha university in securing better jobs. However, three evidences are required to evaluate the position of the argument.

Firstly, author needs to provide evidence (perhaps a survey) to compare the job prospects betweeen students of university of alpha and university of omega. It is possible that more than one variable are at play when it comes to jobs. Perhaps the univesity of alpha is near the area in which majority of employers are and university of omega is in the rural area where a few employers are there. It may be possible that university of alpha offers the programms which are related to current employers need whereas university of omega has outdated courses. If evidence supports any of the two scenarios then the evidence weakens the authors argument.

Secondly, authors needs to give evidence that the students at omega university where successful in getting jobs before the evaluation. It is possible, omega university students where not performing good even before the evaluation started. So, it would be unfair to say that student’s evaluation has a direct affect on job prospects. If the evidence is found that students were doing well in getting job before evaluation started then this evidence would support the authors argument.

Thirdly, there is no evidence that the potential employer’s conclude that average increase in marks means the marks did not reflect academic achievements of a student. It is possible that the employers do not even care about the academic grades as academics grades do not directly relate to job performance. Hence the author needs to provide a evidence (perhaps a research study) which shows that employer considers the academic marks as a variable while choosing an employee. If the authors provides the evidence then it will support the author’s claim.

In conclusion, the author’s claim about student evaluation directly affecting the job prospects is based on author’s personal assumptions and hence cannot be evaluated unless some evidence are provided. The evidence stated in second and third paragraph supports the authors claim whereas, evidence in first paragraph weakens the authors claims.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ddent rise in grades does not perfectly corresponds to student’s academic achievements and ...
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...iversity of omega has outdated courses. If evidence supports any of the two scenar...
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...scenarios then the evidence weakens the authors argument. Secondly, authors needs t...
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... that student’s evaluation has a direct affect on job prospects. If the evidence is found...
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... a variable while choosing an employee. If the authors provides the evidence then ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, whereas, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4362244898 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83186246539 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44387755102 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7873710949 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.352941176 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0588235294 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174478176789 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069252255916 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720432111531 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123588534705 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084118645141 0.0628817314937 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 2064 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.265 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.713 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.471 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5