Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Some people believe that television advertising directed towards young children should be allowed. However, in my opinion, I do not agree and think that these advertisements should not be shown to children below five years for two reasons.
First of all, the tv advertisement creates a desire to buy in children who are naive and do know anything about the real world. Exploiting this naiveness are the companies that advertise a simple product in a showy manner to attract the children, which can be a waste of money most of the time. For example, My four-year-old nephew watches a TV show named Ben 10. Usually, he does not want people to be around when he is watching the show. But one day he invited me to watch the show. After the show ended, there was an advertisement that showed the same gadget that was worn by the show's main character. He immediately pointed towards that gadget and said to buy him one. As an adult, I knew that this toy would not work as shown in the show, but my nephew wanted it. That's why I had to buy him that gadget. It was really expensive but was made of completely cheap plastic. The previous example shows how the advertisements can really waste precious money which could have been used for something better like buying new books. Thus, tv advertisements can both waste your money and create an insatiable desire in children.
Secondly, TV advertisements sometimes cross the line between what is good for adults and what is good for children. Some TV advertisements really show content that requires parental guidance. For example, a TV advertisement that tells that a four-year-old child should start to learn coding skills is just too much. At the age when a child should learn how to read and write, these people are showing them that it is a necessary skill that will be required for your professional career. Parents are also highly susceptible to this kind of advertisement, especially those who are from poor families. These advertisements give false hope to the people just for the sake of earning money. That should not be tolerated at all. Hence, it is really necessary to avoid these types of TV advertisements.
In conclusion, there can be some advertisements that are truly beneficial for the children, but for the majority, this is not the case at all. Thus, TV advertisements made for young children should be avoided because they waste money and can be fraudulent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...they waste money and can be fraudulent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86111111111 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83024144418 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9237051229 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.28 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348937702973 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116839305029 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.185434772705 0.0737576698707 251% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.365794368637 0.150856017488 242% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.280869558705 0.0645574589148 435% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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