Fifteen years ago Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors Since that time Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes and overall student

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The stanza provides us with details about the Student evaluation of professors program introduced by Omega University. It tells us that though since the program was implemented average grade of University has risen, but overall job acquirement by student has shown a decrease. Thus, the author illogically suggest to terminate student evaluation program to rise job securing rate. The statements of the author are very reef and lack specific evidences and are settled down based on lots of assumptions.
Firstly, while telling about the progress of University due to following program, the author tells that professors have assigned higher grades and average grade of University have risen. Though, this seem to be fact describing growth of Universtity, but we need to check other factors as well. There is a possibility that to gain student favor while securing high ratings in Student evaluation program, teachers are offering them higher grade as bribary. There is also it is also possible that students have acquired this grade with real hard work. Also, while telling about statistics, the author describes it in average that seems to be ambiguous and drives us not to any specific conclusion. Thus, the author need to frame his statements more precisely.
Further, the author tells that the potential employeer reveals that grades are inflated as the same students have not shown any significant achievement in there career. The main motive behind the education is to acquire knowledge, enhance the skillsets and further shine in in career. But, there may be some alternative reasons behind less achievements by student. It is possible that some are still figuring out there perfect career. Also, instead of job some may prefer an alternative career to get into startup or academics and focusing on similar opportunities. It can't be denied that some may be preparing for competitive exams to procure more relevant education as well as jobs. Thus, without knowing the whole scenario potential employers cannot just criticize the student achievements.
Moreover, while concluding the author makes very irrelevant prediction that after terminating student evaluation program, student will secure better jobs. One thing is these are totally unrelated things. One point is the job securement in totally based on capability and choice of the student. So, it the student is capable enough, he can acquire job in any scenario. Also, it choice of the student differs from securing job, terminating program will not much change his decision. Thus, prediction has to be made by giving more strong evidences.
Finally, the only advice the author have to follow is to gain some more logically convincing proofs for the predictions. Also, to get a more deep insight must carry out survey on large scale and then decide whether student evaluation of professor is responsible for less job acquirement rates or some other factors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest terminating'.
Suggestion: suggest terminating
... decrease. Thus, the author illogically suggest to terminate student evaluation program to rise job ...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: in
...enhance the skillsets and further shine in in career. But, there may be some alternat...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun achievements is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... may be some alternative reasons behind less achievements by student. It is possible...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...d focusing on similar opportunities. It cant be denied that some may be preparing fo...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...d focusing on similar opportunities. It cant be denied that some may be preparing fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, thus, well, while, as to, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26124197002 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7259445473 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507494646681 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5848467666 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.28 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.68 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202428649758 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581537652992 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626560455203 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120706233799 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545541955753 0.0628817314937 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 14 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 467 350
No. of Characters: 2402 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.649 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.143 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.652 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.68 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.985 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.76 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.294 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5