"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."
First of all, The argument readily assumes that the overall student grade averages at Omega
have risen by 30 percent and it is a dramatic change .This is merely an assumption without much
solid ground. For example there are there are 100 students and 30 students grades are increases
so, it is not dramatic change. Also it is possible that out of 10 students only 3 students
grade will increase than we can say that grading system effects on students result.
Second, the argument claims that the Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting job
as have graduates from nearby Alpha university. This is again weak and unsupported claim as a
the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between graduates students and job. Here, the
author readily assumes that the Alpha university students are more talented than Omega
university students. The author's directly measure the student ability by on students grades.
But there are lot of points that affects to getting the job.
Thirdly, The argument cites that the Potential employers looking at the dramatic changes rises
in grades and believe that the grades are Omega university inflated do not accurately reflect
student achievement. This is again unsupported claim. Because here potential employees readily
assumes that 30 percent is dramatic changes and this grade system is not effective because of
only 30 percent grades are risen. For example there are 1000 student at this university and 300
students grades are increase than we can said that the there is a large amount of students ,
there grades are increase.
Finally, the argument claims that the to enable graduates to secure better jobs Omega
university should terminate student evaluation of professors. Here the argument only consider
the grades for getting the job and argument does not provide any extra factors that affect to
gets tho job. So it is also unpersuasive claims made by the authors. However, careful scrutiny
of the evidence reveals the little credible support to the author conclusion with respect to
several critical points and raises several skeptical questions. Without the answer of this
questions are mention as above, the reader left with the impression the claims made by the
author are more of wishful rather than substantive.
In conclusion, The authors's argument unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the
author provide better concrete examples. It could be considerably strengthened if author
mentions all relevant factors. In order to asses the certain situation it is essential to have
a depth knowledge about contributing factors. So as a result the argument is unsubstantiated
and The conclusion has a no legs to stands.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2219 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.089 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.632 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.316 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y 30 percent and it is a dramatic change .This is merely an assumption without muc...
^^
Line 2, column 55, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...30 percent and it is a dramatic change .This is merely an assumption without much s...
^^^^
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'there are'.
Suggestion: there are
...without much solid ground. For example there are there are 100 students and 30 students grades are...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 32, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...creases so, it is not dramatic change. Also it is possible that out of 10 students ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
... is again weak and unsupported claim as a the argument does not demonstrate any corre...
^^^^^^
Line 16, column 62, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'students'?
Suggestion: students
...s are risen. For example there are 1000 student at this university and 300 students gr...
^^^^^^^
Line 16, column 62, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'student' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'students'.
Suggestion: students
...s are risen. For example there are 1000 student at this university and 300 students gr...
^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 91, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the there is a large amount of students , there grades are increase. Finally, t...
^^
Line 24, column 87, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ptical questions. Without the answer of this questions are mention as above, the re...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3004587156 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68312466697 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465596330275 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.1080729823 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.045454545 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 31.0 5.15768463074 601% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173659100089 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530831827666 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054454026311 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0507653008447 0.128457276422 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051875371631 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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