On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
Mopeds are popular form of commute in Balmer island, in summer population of this particular island significantly escalates to 100,000 and due to that most people travel through mopeds and as a result accident frequency is incresed. Hence, to curb this situation top council of island enforces law towards restrict use of several mopeds in day. Becasue same case happened in last year in neighbour island and using this strategy they are able to hamper the accidents. Stated in this way the argument fails to mentions several key points basis on which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumption for which, there is no clear evidence, so conclusion can be unsubstantiated and unsupproted.
Firsly, The argument readily assumes that population is a major reason for accidents. This is merely an argument without much solid background. Becasue more people drive the mopeds and as a consequence accidents are increased. However, it may be possible most individuals are keen and good drivers; but, major reason of the accidents may be the other vehicles like truck and buses. Apart from this, it might be possible out of 100,000 individual most people use public transportation. Hence, claim against use of the mopeds is not worthy to raise.
Secondly, the argumetns claims that limiting the number of rentals of moped reduces the accident. This is again weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not clarify significant facts for this information. It might be possible every individual have their own moped and they commute using same. So, there is no meaning to curb the numbers of mopeds in a day Hence, this idea is again weak because of council not subsume the vehicles of individuals and develope the law.
Thirdly, the argument readily assume that same case happened in past in Seaville island; using this strategy they controlled the number of accident upto 50 percent. Hence, same thing would happened in Balmer island. Here, argument fails to mention statistics information related to population of Seaville island. Without proper information of other area, it is not worthy to presume the same reslut.
In conclusion, the author's arguments are unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, author must provide relevant facts. It could be considerablt strengthened if author mention every information with solid proof. As a result the author's arguments has a no legs to stand.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1964 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.023 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.425 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 510, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...tated in this way the argument fails to mentions several key points basis on which it co...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 190, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
...pto 50 percent. Hence, same thing would happened in Balmer island. Here, argument fails ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 212, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ion every information with solid proof. As a result the authors arguments has a no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, apart from, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 391.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18925831202 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76144729192 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50895140665 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5037751225 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2173913043 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229487693252 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654553762503 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086481629603 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12140534676 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785035063984 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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