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It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With important of study about past time, often debate has developed whether native history essential for study or International history is more effective in the study curriculum. One side of the debate are those people who claim that local history has great impact and significance on pupils because student flourished in their country and they understand easily. Another side of the view international student grasp knowledge about world-wide history and great personality has lived in the world. Here, I firmly believe that the former view has more weight and this essay will discuss each point that will be proved why local history more effective.

There are manifolds points that shore up my opinion. First and foremost, student easily gets information about the native history and they easily grasp information because proofs of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy has great command on local historical subjects cause of much information available about vernacular history. Whereas, World histories difficult understand because not more resource available on worldwide also some history is written in a foreign language and it is perplexing for students. Although many books and magazine available, but sometimes it is expensive and not releases internationally. For instance, 'After World War 2' history book only available in a few languages consequently, it is not eminent in the world. Hence, study about local history more important.

Further emphasizing on my point of view, students have proper knowledge about vernacular history then, they understand international history effectively. In other words, they recognize the contribution of their country in world history. Moreover, a plethora of international historical events had made by the many domestic phenomena. To exemplify, consider the example of India where students know about the British emperor, therefore, they know what is the situation about India in world war two. Also, they easily understand what is the contribution of India and England in that War.

To conclude, every coin has two side, the importance of world history is not an exception. It is essential for pupils because of not every event and great personality born in the local country but, those things would be beneficial for children. While another hand local history have great light on native students also they can easily visual past situation. Thus, finally, native subjects about past time had better for students in school.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...use proofs of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy has great command on loc...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
... of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy has great command on local
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pedagogy seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much pedagogy', 'a good deal of pedagogy'.
Suggestion: much pedagogy; a good deal of pedagogy
... of history are available. In addition. many pedagogy has great command on local histo...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...n. Thus, finally, native subjects about past time had better for students in school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4160.0 1615.20841683 258% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 596.0 315.596192385 189% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.97986577181 5.12529762239 136% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94096258147 4.20363070211 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.36025243194 2.80592935109 155% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.362416107383 0.561755894193 65% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1045.8 506.74238477 206% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 154.299000016 49.4020404114 312% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 208.0 106.682146367 195% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0865179589669 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600019873488 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055413134451 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850606770418 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419833705573 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.3 13.0946893788 201% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 50.2224549098 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 23.8 12.4159519038 192% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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